Dreams Crushed Under The Harsh Truth

Sad Panda

Sadness

Consumes the emotions

Waiting replaced with weeping

 

The wonderful plan

And ingenious thoughts

Have been crushed by the harsh truth

 

Neither of us where ready

But still we thought we colud

The life that was so close

Now just a distant dream

 

Another year apart

Hearing your voice

With torterous love

 

Wanting to be with you

But trapped in that hellish hole

Stuck in that horrible cage

Forced to hear your pain

 

Unable to help

 

I'm sorry i ruined it now

And put you through it all

 

I love you more than life itself

 

Longing for your soothing touch

Wanting to gaze into those majestic eyes

 

I wirte,holding back the tears

Feeling the cold hard stell of that knife

Turning and twisting in my soul

 

I can't take beign away from you

But i would do anything for you

So if that means i have to wait an eternity to see your heavenly face

 

Then i shall wait

 

In my sorrow

 

And listen for that beautyful choir

To call my name and heal my pain

 

If only for a moment

 

 

 

 

I LOVE YOU AND IM SORRY I RUINED OUR PLANS!!!!!!!! :(

 

 

Reviews

[Matt]

this poem is pretty good.
but a few things. you have some grammar errors that will make the piece look cleaner and easier to read and have an around better flow if you fix them.
And it may not seem important but if you use ... or , or . then the reader will know how you want to poem to flow. overall a good read.

[Victoria Thornton]

wow