Childs cry

For the love of parents, it never ends.

I am a cocoon in her arms
Buried safely against her
Embracing her; and her with I
she is the fire that protects me
to burn whoever would try to possess me
to scorn the masses of people who could harm me


mother


I am a cocoon in his arms
Buried safely against him
Embracing him; and him with I
he is the fire that protects me
to burn whoever would try to possess me
to scorn the masses of people who could harm me

father

Reviews

[SilentDreamer]

Great poem, it definitely shows the love you can see mother's and father's have for their children and yet also the love children can have for their parents. Creative idea written in an interesting way. Great job.

[Talkativeted]

I think you way this is written is a wonderful idea. The contrasting mother and father verses are well constructed. A beautiful poem.

[Hannah]

Beautiful imagery, the feeling of the child's adoration and reliance on their parents is very strong. The structure works well and the rhythm is flawless. Your use of language creates a warm feeling of safety and family, and the repeated lines give a really nice effect. Brilliant piece and very enjoyable read ^-^

[Elliot Kyron]

This is lovely. It's simple, but pure. It brought a smile to face. I adored this line "to burn whoever would try to possess me" Simply beautiful.

[Neumia]

I like the mirror aspect of this poem and the sing song way it is written. Also love the image of "I am a cocoon in his/her arms buried safely against him/her". the two stanzas are repetitive, but nicely so. I think it works.

[Lou Evans]

I enjoyed the repititon of both poems. It was nice. Changing it to he after she. My favorite line is "she/he is the fire that protects me" It was the one line that sort of stuck with me. The line seems different and it flows together nicely.

[Lady KrimZen]

Two nice little poems.
The metaphor 'I am a cocoon in her/his arms' works really well in these poems.

[Hollywood]

It's simple but very well written. Seems very sincere, I hope you do share this relationship with your parents since it is rare to come by theese days.

[Amber]

this is pretty good. and normally i am into the whole rhyming thing, but i like this. keep up the good work.

[cheeeeese]

This seemed very sincere, and that's what was great about. I liked how the descriptions were the same with both the mother and father also. And this was VERY well-written. Simple, but very effective and touching. I loved it.