Pain Lingers

The pain lingers

in the doorway

Yet it will never be gone

It sits in mocking greive

as i mourn for it to leave me and find

someone worse off then I

Reviews

[revenant21]

Very good write. Shorter than I thought, but that in no way depleted it. Good job.

[The Water Queen]

ITs meant to mourn becuase she has realised that it will never leaver her so she mourns her misfortune

[hope.]

mourn for it to leave? or yearn for it to leave?
(that confused me)

[Jeff Miller]

intense

[Star Wolf]

Nice and intense. How I often wish pain to just go away, all sorts of pains.

[Poetic Beauty]

I have had many days like this recently. I have been filled with sadness anger and depression. I do have good day too but this poem really hits home with me. I can relate really well with this one right now.

[Alex W]

Pain is a good motivator, I like feeling it's sting once in a while.

Not in a kinky sense lol. I'll just point that out.

Kudos!

[Frantzuu]

SHort but powerful, :D

[Shalini Dinesh]

short poem about pain... well done,

as i mourn for it to leave me and find
someone worse off then I

poor some one else.....
the lines are well framed!

[deeps]

This is wonderful and so is the imagery.