Cut My Wrist

Cut my wrist

with a silver knife

Black my eyes

with a dirty fist

Can't you call death

Tell him I'm ready

Cause I can't make it

Because you killed me.

You killed me

with your hurtful words

you killed me

with your silver knife

Just call mr. Reaper

He'll pick up

He knows my number

My wrists cut

left a puddle of blood

for me to sleep in

My eyes are swelling

They're goin to close

Call mr. Reaper

He'll pick up

Call mr. Reaper

Tell him

Tell him

I'm ready

Reviews

[Jezebell]

"So cut my wrists and black my eyes, so i can fall asleep tonight...or die. Becuase you kill me -" your poem reminded me of those lyrics to a song - In a good way! :)

[A.Lee]

Wow... I like the simplistic words here. The way its written is very engaging. I also like the repetition. Its there, but its not like patterned. Nice job. Hopefully, if you felt this way when you wrote it you feel better now.

[NightsShade]

Very disturbing... A good poem nonetheless.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem is violent and disturbing. Disturbing in a sense that you take the readers emotions and force them to see things from your point of view. Sometimes society needs someone to rock their world. I found myself emotionally invested in this person rather quickly. You latched on with light speed. Great writing!

[Star Wolf]

A lot of horrible pain that's just too hard to deal with and suicide/death seems the only answer. Impressive write.

[larryb]

Saves the Queen and kicks the s**t out of Mr reaper and sends him packing.......nice stuff missy

[Lost, n'MT]

This is full of so many raw and deep emotions and that I experienced myself firsthand many years ago. It's pieces like this that you are able to express when you feel you are at your lowest. It takes a lot of courage to share this and I appreciate you for sharing. I think it written well and the emotion behind is what really stands out.

[Rasha]

I H8 it!!
Only jkin x
AMAZIN!!!
so much...emotion, lovedit
-Rasha x

[Sean M. Addams]

very deep and dark..you kind of took us on a emotional journey on this one... great job and very visual..

[Bette]

oh nooooo!! your not ready! very deep poem. well done