Self

I wrote this on 4/13/2009 in school.

A twisted thread, confused

never to be woven, abused

by its silly self, withheld

from its conception-

from what?

 

I don't know how the fabric feels, I only know its look

Yet I envy its flaws, for flaws exist when one weaves

but I, I am a thread.. Incomplete.

 

Author's Note

I am never confident in my work, and this, being not the best poem I've written in my mind, is no exception.

Reviews

[mmzx]

this is a very good piece. well done !
:D

[Jordan Madrid]

Don't worry so much about inconsistent structure or rhyme. Structure should be built to serve the poem, not the other way around. Just look at e.e. Cummings. Keep doing what your doing, find new and interesting way to explore your own voice, not copy others. Good piece, the emotion is well formed.

[Vain Apocalypse]

While you may not be confident in this piece, and while it may not be your best work, I thought it notably enjoyable. It has a rhythm about it that lets it flow with ease, in spite of the inconsistent structure and rhyme. It also has a depth in its theme that I enjoy seeing in such brief work. I think I'll be reading more of you.

[Butterflymom]

This is an awesome piece, and it was very well done!! I thought it was beautiful, creative, and original. Keep writing!!!