Like a knife

Like a knife

A Poem by GlacialStars
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This was a bit inspired by the song "Like a knife" by secondhand serenade

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Delicate dagger whisper to me

Promise glee and ecstasy

Your blade so cold

But your handle so warm

Calls upon the roughest storms

A light scrape is all I ask

Bring back the passion from my past


The gentle feel of heaven’s touch

The burn from hell I love so much

Icy shards penetrate my wound

Delicate poison that drastically swoons


Burning sensation running through my veins

Pulsing thoughts and images through my brain

Red rose petals drops from my wrist

Mesmerizing feelings of agony and bliss


Shivers felt across my hand

Continues as the blade depends and expands

The rose petals kept leaking out

As tiny snowflakes begin to sprout


Frost filling my bloody abyss

Lips begging for one last kiss

An eclipse of warmth, an eclipse of light

I slowly start losing my sight


Rain merges with the pool of petals

This anguish quickly becomes lethal

I breathe no more, I’m forgotten

Noticing the veil of darkness that has risen


The blade in my wrist disappears without warning

Left within this cold and depressing ending

Condemned to a glacial existence

Abandoned with dreams of exuberance


Turning into glacier

Dreaming of an happy ever after


In love you only fall twice

When it strikes you like a knife

© 2012 GlacialStars


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GlacialStars
Please do comment! :DD

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This is awesome man. Great imagery and word choice. Those opening lines, structured how they are, are eye catching, to say the least. Good stuff.

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Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow! Amazing! This is very nicely written. I love the metaphors. Your use of imagery is incredible. Very emotional and powerful. Great job on this piece. Two thumbs up. I really enjoyed this. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


GlacialStars

12 Years Ago

Haha thanks a lot you xD Go secondhand serenade!
Alejandra

12 Years Ago

No problem.
First off, fall for you by secondhand serenade is a favorite of mine and although im unfamiliar with this song im sure its just as good and second, beautifully done! The details, the emotion, the imagery! Fantastic!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Death made so welcome with your words. The forbidden made so easy. I loved the ending. Your use of imagery is very timely to give the wanted effect. Please keep writing and sharing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I love this poem, you are amazing with your words!

Posted 12 Years Ago


GlacialStars

12 Years Ago

Thank ya haha!
Wow, very dark and beautifully delivered. Very nice job here!

Posted 12 Years Ago


GlacialStars

12 Years Ago

Yeah it was a combination of merging something good and passionate with something that everyone fear.. read more
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Mir
They way this is written makes you able to feel the emotions that you're trying to condem! I'm extremeley glad Lost Soul requested me to read this! If not I would have missed out on an excelent piece of work!

Posted 12 Years Ago


GlacialStars

12 Years Ago

:DD I was requested? Man talk about an ego boost! Thank you so much for reading and for reviewing!read more
Mir

12 Years Ago

Haha you're welcome!:)
A very powerfully poem!! Totally agree with .Lost Soul. "this is an epic poem" 100/100

Posted 12 Years Ago


This poem is EXTREMELY POWERFUL. I could feel shivers running down my spine as I read this. This piece hits so many emotional levels for many people and it's great. This is an intense, heart-breaking piece that makes you stop and think for a bit. I read this poem three times before I found the right words to say. Some of my favorite parts/lines/stanzas were
"Shivers felt across my hand
Continues as the blade depends and expands
The rose petals kept leaking out
As tiny snowflakes begin to sprout" ~ I loved the personification in this, I think comparing the blood to rose petals set an off mood to it (in a good way though) Also: "In love you only fall twice
When it strikes you like a knife" ~ Wow, what a way to end a poem.
Dude, this an epic poem. I like it, a lot. 100/100


Posted 12 Years Ago


GlacialStars

12 Years Ago

Ah ^//^ thank you very very much! If only you knew what this meant to me haha thanks for recommendin.. read more

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Added on November 27, 2012
Last Updated on November 27, 2012
Tags: love, pain, knife, suicide

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GlacialStars
GlacialStars

Netherlands Antilles



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I'm a 17 year old silly, random and dangerously optimistic guy. I am condemned to live in a 5 foot five body and most happy to be a free spirit although I am bounded within the roots of my country. .. more..

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