The Tale of Oroya and her Horses

The Tale of Oroya and her Horses

A Poem by Falling Leaf.
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Folklore-style longer poem.

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Oroya was not born. 
She simply woke, woke in a body, 
a body with fingers, toes, eyes, and a thumping heart. 
She woke a child, trapped in a wondrous, marvelous, peculiar land. 
Oroya was the only human, 
but she never knew of loneliness, 
for she never knew what company was like, 
save the company of the wind, the rain, the sun, and the animals. 


Her secret land sprawled for infinite miles, 
and she explored every inch of them, every day, 
until her limbs grew long, and her body began to curve, 
and there was only one more Mile left, 
one slice of land which she had not yet tasted. 
She always skirted the edges of the shadowed corner, 
dipped her toes in the water of a stream that disappeared round the bend, 
into the unknown Mile. 


Finally, on a day which blossomed from a promising rosy dawn, 
Oroya rose from her bed of various foliage and 
squinted against the glorious sun, 
her eyes flitting across the purple mountaintops, 
blinking against the sparkling water, 
until she found the Mile. 
It was a curious piece of woods, shady even in high noon. 
For it Oroya took off, running through the miles 
which she already knew, shamelessly naked as she was every day. 



Just as the sun began to settle, Oroya skidded to a stop 
at the bank of the stream.
Trees creaked in the wind, branches swaying, beckoning her in. 
Slowly, she entered the Mile. 
Foreign twigs scraped at her skin. 
One slashed across her breast, and she whimpered. 
Frightened, she turned to leave the Mile. 
It was different than the others, 
not full of buttery sunshine and whistling birds. 


A sliver of color winked from between the trees. 
Hypnotized, Oroya ran for it, ran and ran, 
until she paused at a pool, bursting and writhing with 
colors she had never seen before. 
She stretched her fingers and skimmed the rainbow water. 
Violet, scarlet, turquoise... all the hues dripped from her fingers. 
She plunged her arm in, and it came out streaked with colors. 
Oroya hung her feet in the pool, marveling at the whirling water 
for hours and hours to come. 


That night, when the sky was inky and black, 
Oroya was disturbed by a muffled rustling. 
She scrambled out of the pool and scanned the forest. 
When a ghostly white shape emerged, 
she recognized the animal immediately. 
It was just a horse, just a plain, white horse. 
She had seen them many times roaming the fields. 
Another one followed the first, and she approached the two animals. 
"My friends," she said. "What has brought you all the way out here?" 

The horses replied in their gruff voices: 
"Oroya, here is the water which paints this land with color. 
Without it, we all turn black and gray and white. 
This pool is a gift, but we mustn't waste it." 


Oroya reached out to pet one of the horses. 
She ran her fingers over and over their soft fur, 
over their backs and flanks and legs, 
leaving streaks of rainbow water. 
Soon the horses were completely striped with lines of color. 
They were so beautiful to Oroya 
that she lured the other white horses to the rainbow pool, 
and stroked them for minutes upon hours upon days, 
until there wasn't a single pure white horse in all of the land. 


Some time later, Oroya returned to the pool and dunked her arms in, 
only to find that they were hanging in air. 
Frowning, she slid her hands along the edge. The dirt was dry. 
She peered over the bank. To her horror, 
the magical rainbow water was gone, and the pool was empty. 
Her friend's words echoed through her head: 
"Without the water...without the water..." 


The sun flickered and blinked out. The trees hunched and shriveled. 
The billowing fields of green grass moaned and faded to gray. 
The blue of the sky drained into nothing. 
Lastly, Oroya's beautiful horses lost every streak of color. 
Their white coats, once striped with rainbows, 
were now layered with ribbons of black. 


Without the beauty of her land, Oroya laid to rest, 
curled up in the dry crevasse where the pool once was, 
and never awakened. 


As for the now black and white horses, 
somehow, some way, they escaped the mournful, wasted land, 
and have found their way into the world we live in. 
Our world isn't just about color and beauty, 
in our world there is also sadness and darkness, 
and their black stripes turned out to be not so bad after all. 

© 2015 Falling Leaf.


Author's Note

Falling Leaf.
This is a throwback from years ago. I posted this on here about two years ago, and I was hacked. Everything was erased. I have no idea whose hands this poem got into but I figured I would give it a try again. Note this is quite old and my writing style has changed. Please leave all thoughts. Thank you.

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I'm sorry you found your work erased. I hope it was not pilfered as well. I ran this piece through three of the plagiarism checkers I found online and the only links all three brought up were to this post. (One of the checkers brought up a page on WC that showed no author and read that the post had been removed.

This is certainly a very unique mythology you've created. I feel like you're telling us how the zebras got their stripes. One can compare the evolution between this piece and your more recent writes; however, it definitely feels like your work to me.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Falling Leaf.

9 Years Ago

Thank you. Im glad you didn't find it on any other mysterious accounts. I have been worried about th.. read more
MomzillaNC

9 Years Ago

You're welcome. There are numerous plagiarism checkers online. I wish I could afford a couple of the.. read more



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"a body with fingers, toes, eyes, and a thumping heart. " - No comma needed before the "and" here.

"save the company of the wind, the rain, the sun, and the animals. " - Or here...

"until her limbs grew long, and her body began to curve," - Or here......

"Her secret land sprawled for infinite miles,
and she explored every inch of them, every day, " - Vice versa the "and" does not fit here after the comma.

You get the idea I'm not going to do it to every time you use the word "and" but it completely ruins this otherwise beautiful piece of writing.


Posted 9 Years Ago


Tinotenda Nyevedzanai

9 Years Ago

I think punctuation does not have to go by a set of "rules" so much in art as it is used by the auth.. read more
Falling Leaf.

9 Years Ago

Thank you for your thoughts, but I always have and always will use the Oxford comma, this piece has .. read more
Tinotenda Nyevedzanai

9 Years Ago

You don't have to defend your work to me, I hope that you write for the love of the passion not for .. read more
Have you ever tried putting this story into book form and trying to market it?? Valentine

Posted 9 Years Ago


Falling Leaf.

9 Years Ago

No, can't say I have
Valentine

9 Years Ago

You seem to have the gift of story telling.
Falling Leaf.

9 Years Ago

Thank you, Kathie, my folks call it being over dramatic, but I'd like to make it a career someday. :.. read more
Nice one. Even though it is old soo what it has turned into gold. I really like the poem

Posted 9 Years Ago


Falling Leaf.

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Terrence :)
Terrence Chang

9 Years Ago

Your welcome leaf
This was beautiful! Not only does it teach a life lesson but it does so with such grace. I think it would be very difficult to resist touching the rainbow pool.
I'm sorry to hear that you were hacked earlier, I'm glad you saved this one and was brave enough to post it again, for I am so glad I read it :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


I enjoyed the story. I try to back-up and I have a backup site. I do paper also. Lately using internet only. I like how you create strong characters and logical ending with wisdom.
"As for the now black and white horses,
somehow, some way, they escaped the mournful, wasted land,
and have found their way into the world we live in.
Our world isn't just about color and beauty,
in our world there is also sadness and darkness,
and their black stripes turned out to be not so bad after all. "
Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


What a wonderful tale!! This is very special!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Youve got something INSANELY special here! I dont think i have ever read a more beautiful and enchanting poem story hybrid than this wonderful piece! You took an average, everyday animal and gave it quite an interesting legend. THAT takes top notch writing ability! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


bravo...what an amazing tale you weaved here...eloquent story teller you are

Posted 9 Years Ago


I'm sorry that you have to go through this... For every creator losing their work to someone else is like letting their children be kidnapped by someone:) They can only snatch away your creation, but never your creativity... which is proven from your other writings:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Beautiful piece, a lovely story told. Vibrant imagery, and a striking message, all within a very imaginative piece.
Really enjoyed reading this :)

Posted 9 Years Ago



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