Claustrophobia

Is the air in this room draining, 
or are my lungs shrinking? 
Am I shackled to this chair,
or have my muscles turned to ice?

Brick by brick I am walled in. 
My heart trembles as white noise fills my ears.

I am trapped. Death is imminent, it is here, it is now.
Brick by brick by brick.
Breathe breathe f*****g BREATHE--

Wait. 

This room is smaller than before,
I am sure, I am sure. 

Where has the door handle gone?
Why is it so hard to breathe?

I am never going to see the sky again.
Bricks and bricks and bricks--
A tomb. 

A place to rot. 

Lock me in,

LET

ME

OUT

Author's Note

Critique the hell out of me.

Reviews

[Kurl Urban]

"Is the air in this room draining, or are my lungs shrinking? Am I shackled to this chair, or have my muscles turned to ice?" This portion of the poem instantly transmute's the reader to the scene at hand. I feel like it could easily sit well being accompanied in a short theatrical act to help bring the words alive, through a play. "Amazing"

[Falling Leaf.]

Thank you!

[Einstein Noodle]

what a challenge .. Claustrophobia .. i would never have thought to write about it and my girlfriend suffers greatly from it .. i think this is a fine attempt but you have spoiled me with "Emma" ;) reading your poetry is opening my mind up to a whole new subject spectrum .. so thank you for the inspiration
E.

[Falling Leaf.]

Thank you!

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a great poem. It really does describe claustrophobia! I could feel the fear of being locked in a place...and it feels like you are never gonna escape. The flow was amazing too. Thank you for sharing.

[Falling Leaf.]

Thank you!

[Angie Diane♥♥]

No problem!

[pdavinci]

Beautiful. I don't think you needed to blur out that one word, but do whatever you want. You did real well.

[Falling Leaf.]

What do you mean, blur out that one word? I didn't blur anything out.

[pdavinci]

Not really "blurred", but you said "Breathe breathe f*****g BREATHE--" I just think you could have said the actual word "f*****g" rather than "f*****g".

[pdavinci]

Oh wait. Nevermind. It seems the website does that on purpose. Never mind.

[Falling Leaf.]

Yeah. I actually typed it out. :P

[Kringefest]

Very well penned poem, mate. The structure and repetition of "brick by brick by brick" helps set the mood. It has a flow oh-so great and smooth as well... The sudden ending was a nice touch, with every word on a different line. Nicely done.

[Falling Leaf.]

Thank you, it's truly appreciated.

[Kringefest]

No problem at all.