Save Us

Searching for a ray of hope in a demise-colored sky,
stretching fingers up into the choked air.
Praying for just one wisp to breathe. 

But finding that our grave has been dug,
and remembering the muddy shovel in our own trunks. 

Wondering if just talking will save us. 

Yet despising the idea of acting,
letting the world spin deeper into hell. 

Ignoring the dying things beneath our feet,
thinking that someone else has the answers.

Yet no one has anything to say. 

Waiting, just waiting, waiting for change,
as if it will happen on its own.

Author's Note

Comments appreciated. :)

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

This is the way of most people.
"Ignoring the dying things beneath our feet,
thinking that someone else has the answers."
Few will raise voice and demand the right ways. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry. Left reader food for thoughts in your words.
Coyote

[Falling Leaf.]

Thank you, Coyote, it is much appreciated. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Dannyisawriter]

I really liked it. I give 10 out of 10 :)

[forevermore1218]

i loved it :) very well written
100/100

[Dutch Jr.]

I love the wittiness of that second stanza:

"But finding that our grave has been dug,
and remembering the muddy shovel in our own trunks."

And completely I agree; we are digging our own graves. This entire poem features ways of humanity that perhaps need to change, especially the fact that no one will initiate change. Your writing is clear and concise.

[Falling Leaf.]

Thank you very much. :)

[willweb]

Ignorance may be bliss, but also makes you ignorant. To turn a blind eye to those who need, expecting someone else to pick up the slack, might be the way it is but is definitely the way it shouldn't be. Very cool. Another one I enjoyed a lot.

[Falling Leaf.]

Thanks again!

[Dr Ayaz chandio]

an other lovely piece. this too carries a beautiful message and also raises an important question at the end"waiting,waiting for change...as if it will happen on its own" this is the case with today's world !

[Falling Leaf.]

Thank you, for the lovely review. :)

[Kurl Urban]

I feel like this particular poem strikes a personal cord, and its brutal honesty undressed, which you pour out in buckets upon the recipient, "now I am wet" with a cold sensation running down my spine somehow open to this immediate truth articulated by you, great work indeed. Expect a true follower to what lurks from your keyboard.

[Falling Leaf.]

It is indeed a cold and immediate truth. Thank you, for the contemplative and incredible review.

[Magnus]

I usually love seeing other people's likes so you can thank Coyote for this review for its due to his review that I came! I loved this piece but wouldn't replacing us with her collated well with the title? Would love to know why you wrote it as you did! "Wondering if just talking will save Us"

[Falling Leaf.]

Ah, I didn't even notice that! Thank you! When I originally wrote this, the title was "Save Her, Save Us." But for reasons unbeknownst even to myself I decided to change it. I will go in and change the title. Thank you for the review. :)

[Magnus]

You're welcome!