Forest Fire

It doesn’t matter what ash is spread against me

He isn’t finished; he’s still out on his spree

A telltale sign that I’m not quite burned out yet:

The crackle of amber not ready to call quits

They say, “don’t give up!”, they chant, “keep on running!”

But prevention’s the best way to keep him from spreading

Reviews

[JessyJacob]

Prevention is better than cure, to balance and keep logical with relationship, giving equal importance to everyone, will go World peace. I came to know why you are so lovable/caring person, only for others, not for your personal, clearly shows yourself. There is little patience wanting for to live. Trusting you, which shows burning fire, not exactly what i mean, but the need for me, which i always I ever cared, is only you/Him. I want to join you, to help others.
I like your pic.

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thank you for the kind review and wise words!! I'm glad you enjoyed my work :)

[barleygirl]

Your brief message seems to point toward the common occurrence where someone is being "burned" by a lover, yet he/she won't leave, he/she won't protect him/herself . . . sometimes both sides still have some "burning" yet to do to each other in many relationships. "Forest Fire" is a very good analogy for this, altho I feel the imagery of "fire" could be pumped up a bit.

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thank you for kind review! This poem is not actually about a lover, or even two separate people at all. The man/fire is actually just another part of me that I'm trying to change, but it keeps catching me and taking me over.

[barleygirl]

They say that we all have both male & female aspects inside us . . . I can read this as these two factions warring within the same person! Thanks for the extra insight.

[RannunculusBlooms]

i love the use of the onomatopoeia! great personification of a forest fire! plus that last line is 11/10

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thank you for the wonderful review!!! I'm glad that line was powerful to you, I put a lot of thought into it :)

[Alice Maria]

Great use of personification. I enjoyed reading this poem.

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thank you :)

[Darker_Wolf]

Well Penned... In my youth I carried my Red Card and fought several fires in California/Washington... You never know when it is over. It can flare up in the damndest places. Prevention is the key.
Wolf ,'', ^@@^ ,'',

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thank you for the review and the interesting insight! It can be hard to stop something from spread once it's begun - literally AND figuratively.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Personification of forest fires is well portrayed.
"He isn’t finished; he’s still out on his spree




A telltale sign that I’m not quite burned out yet:

The crackle of amber not ready to call quits"
Rightly said!
Great use of vocab...

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thank you for the kind review! Glad you enjoyed it :)

[writ rajat]

JAI MAHA KAAAL BAHUT SUNDAR KAVITA HAI MAHASAY

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thank you!! Glad you think it's good :)

[Mr.Writer]

This is amazing! Keep up the great work!

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thank you!! Glad you enjoyed it :)