Time Wizard

Time Wizard

A Poem by TheUnrulyWriter

I'm just a normal man
Who can't control the time
But if I were a wizard
I'd put it on rewind

I'd frolick through my childhood
I'd right the wrongs I knew
But most of all if I went back
I would never have lost you

But like the moon shines on the river
All will soon be dark
Yet although the time still passes
So constant is your mark

I'm just a lonely normal man
Who can't control the time
But if I were a wizard
I would have never lost my mind

© 2017 TheUnrulyWriter


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This is one thought provoking write, TheUnrulyWriter. If I were a time wizard even I would want to go back and undo the decisions that I took at certain phase of life. But, I believe we learn a lot from the decisions we take..good or bad whatever the outcome may be it teaches us something.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheUnrulyWriter

7 Years Ago

Thanks for the review! I wrote this poem about a character I made up and I don't think if I was a ti.. read more



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Whimsical with a bit of sadness. I like the little twist at the end about losing your mind.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheUnrulyWriter

7 Years Ago

Thank you! I'm glad you saw the whimsical side of it too, I didn't want it to be purely depressing.
I enjoyed reading this piece. It's theme touches most people, I believe.
In the last line of the second stanza, might you consider using "have" instead of "had"? The verb "have" seems more grammatically correct, if that is an issue for you. You used "have" to express the past tense correctly in the last line of your poem.
Keep on writing!


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheUnrulyWriter

7 Years Ago

Thank you for the review! That line was actually bothering me a lot, so I think I'll change it :)
This is one thought provoking write, TheUnrulyWriter. If I were a time wizard even I would want to go back and undo the decisions that I took at certain phase of life. But, I believe we learn a lot from the decisions we take..good or bad whatever the outcome may be it teaches us something.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheUnrulyWriter

7 Years Ago

Thanks for the review! I wrote this poem about a character I made up and I don't think if I was a ti.. read more

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Added on February 9, 2017
Last Updated on March 16, 2017
Tags: poem, poetry, wizard, time, friends, past, sad

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TheUnrulyWriter
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I write stories, poems, and songs. I am a multi-instrumentalist, and I'm always wanting to learn more of 'em. My writing is mostly abstract and focuses on psychological, philosophical, and/or spir.. more..

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