Existential Ohm

the opposite of an existential crisis

It's not that it's there,

It's that it's happening

There's darkness and lightness 

And I'm there

I don't understand it

And that's fine

If I was bigger

The world would seem small

But I'm puny

And grateful

For I can look up

And see life

Reviews

[Poetic License]

This is fantastic! You have said so much, so simply, so eloquently. I cannot say enough great things about this. This style truly appeals to me - when you can speak metaphor without saying a word. This absolutely gripped me from the first lines through the last. This could have been a great epic, and then.....well, as it turns out it was, indeed. It was epic tale of possibility - life. How grand your writing. I completely embrace this. Well done.

Standing on my little bar stool to cheer loudly.

[TheUnrulyWriter]

I'm you liked it so much!! This poem is actually from my own diary, so it's nice to know that something I wrote for personal reasons touches people I don't even know :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This speaks of someone who is contented in their own skin and in life. It has a confidence and a calmness about it expressed succinctly in crisp flowing tones.

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thank you!! :)

[barleygirl]

Many times I'm not very good at reading abstract poetry, but I definitely like the open-ended way you are sharing these somewhat opposing ideas. There's plenty of space for your readers to bring their own ideas of what existential issues may be at hand. This feels straightforward & friendly, which I much prefer when I'm reading.

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thanks for the review! I also prefer minimalistic poetry because it's more open to interpretation and imagination :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A nice ending to the poem.
"But I'm puny
And grateful
For I can look up
And see life"
The above lines. Solid ad true. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thank you for the review! I'm glad you appreciated the ending :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I did and you are welcome.

[Lovecraft]

A short but good philosophical poem. It's simple but profound.

Very good, Mr. Unruly! :)

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thank you for the nice review!!

[Diamond]

A deeply thought provoking write. Regardless of the conditions the Existence is "there".....I loved this line
"I don't understand it
And that's fine"
Well done!

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thanks for the review!! I loved those lines too (of course I do, I wrote them lol). I think the world wouldn't be as cool if we understood all of it. Then we wouldn't have anything to learn!

[Manu]

Being a bit philosophical myself, I can relate to this write. Everything lies within. If we can understand the subconscious self we get directly linked to that ultimate creator. Though, I am not very religious but I have always worshipped Shiva. Frankly speaking I see him in universe and universe in him and both within my subconscious self. He is in every element of existence I feel.
This is truly an uplifting write, TheUnrulyWriter.
Thanks for sharing this spiritual piece of writing :-)
I am glad that I could read something like this.

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thank you for the review! My sort of religiousness is kind of weird; I don't believe in any God or gods, but I really like what Shiva stands for. So I worship him and try and live in a way that represents what he represents. I wanted my respect for both the universe and Shiva to show through in this poem, and I'm glad you saw that as well!

[Manu]

I understand your point of view..because I have my own apprehensions about God...I feel Faith is what works everywhere...it does wonders...I believe in everything as well as in nothing.
You are welcome.

[Tbear]

Its the simple words that speak volumes..I greatly enjoyed the feel and the lesson in this poem...

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thank you! Glad you liked it :)

[Zoya]

These limited lines of yours speak volumes! You don't want to decipher the mystery behind life, instead you are grateful for who you are and what you have...great notion! I just wanted to know if the "ohm" in the title of your poem is referring to the icon of Hinduism...or is it something else? I am not questioning the eminence of the poem...just wanted to know :)

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thank you for the review! Ohm was in reference to Hinduism, specifically the mantra "Om namah Shivaya" (I changed the spelling for aesthetic reasons") That mantra means to many people "love Shiva in yourself". Shiva represents the destruction and creation of the universe. So the mantra could also mean "love all the universe in yourself". :)

[Zoya]

Yeah that's what I thought...you're welcome btw :)

[Asante]

This is an excellently-written piece of philosophy here. It had an innocence to it that gave me a good feeling throughout. Perhaps we're best as the small beings able to appreciate life, and we lose that appreciation with increasing height.

Wonderful work. :)

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Haha maybe that's why hobbits are always so happy!! Thank you for the review :)

[Asante]

True! Or elves, unless you're Kreacher of the Potter series, haha. My pleasure. :)