Existential Ohm

Existential Ohm

A Poem by TheUnrulyWriter
"

the opposite of an existential crisis

"
It's not that it's there,
It's that it's happening
There's darkness and lightness 
And I'm there

I don't understand it
And that's fine
If I was bigger
The world would seem small

But I'm puny
And grateful
For I can look up
And see life

© 2017 TheUnrulyWriter


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This is fantastic! You have said so much, so simply, so eloquently. I cannot say enough great things about this. This style truly appeals to me - when you can speak metaphor without saying a word. This absolutely gripped me from the first lines through the last. This could have been a great epic, and then.....well, as it turns out it was, indeed. It was epic tale of possibility - life. How grand your writing. I completely embrace this. Well done.

Standing on my little bar stool to cheer loudly.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheUnrulyWriter

7 Years Ago

I'm you liked it so much!! This poem is actually from my own diary, so it's nice to know that someth.. read more



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This is fantastic! You have said so much, so simply, so eloquently. I cannot say enough great things about this. This style truly appeals to me - when you can speak metaphor without saying a word. This absolutely gripped me from the first lines through the last. This could have been a great epic, and then.....well, as it turns out it was, indeed. It was epic tale of possibility - life. How grand your writing. I completely embrace this. Well done.

Standing on my little bar stool to cheer loudly.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheUnrulyWriter

7 Years Ago

I'm you liked it so much!! This poem is actually from my own diary, so it's nice to know that someth.. read more
This speaks of someone who is contented in their own skin and in life. It has a confidence and a calmness about it expressed succinctly in crisp flowing tones.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheUnrulyWriter

7 Years Ago

Thank you!! :)
Many times I'm not very good at reading abstract poetry, but I definitely like the open-ended way you are sharing these somewhat opposing ideas. There's plenty of space for your readers to bring their own ideas of what existential issues may be at hand. This feels straightforward & friendly, which I much prefer when I'm reading.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheUnrulyWriter

7 Years Ago

Thanks for the review! I also prefer minimalistic poetry because it's more open to interpretation an.. read more
A nice ending to the poem.
"But I'm puny
And grateful
For I can look up
And see life"
The above lines. Solid ad true. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheUnrulyWriter

7 Years Ago

Thank you for the review! I'm glad you appreciated the ending :)
Coyote Poetry

7 Years Ago

I did and you are welcome.
A short but good philosophical poem. It's simple but profound.

Very good, Mr. Unruly! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheUnrulyWriter

7 Years Ago

Thank you for the nice review!!
A deeply thought provoking write. Regardless of the conditions the Existence is "there".....I loved this line
"I don't understand it
And that's fine"
Well done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


TheUnrulyWriter

7 Years Ago

Thanks for the review!! I loved those lines too (of course I do, I wrote them lol). I think the worl.. read more
Being a bit philosophical myself, I can relate to this write. Everything lies within. If we can understand the subconscious self we get directly linked to that ultimate creator. Though, I am not very religious but I have always worshipped Shiva. Frankly speaking I see him in universe and universe in him and both within my subconscious self. He is in every element of existence I feel.
This is truly an uplifting write, TheUnrulyWriter.
Thanks for sharing this spiritual piece of writing :-)
I am glad that I could read something like this.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheUnrulyWriter

7 Years Ago

Thank you for the review! My sort of religiousness is kind of weird; I don't believe in any God or g.. read more
Manu

7 Years Ago

I understand your point of view..because I have my own apprehensions about God...I feel Faith is wha.. read more
Its the simple words that speak volumes..I greatly enjoyed the feel and the lesson in this poem...

Posted 7 Years Ago


TheUnrulyWriter

7 Years Ago

Thank you! Glad you liked it :)
These limited lines of yours speak volumes! You don't want to decipher the mystery behind life, instead you are grateful for who you are and what you have...great notion! I just wanted to know if the "ohm" in the title of your poem is referring to the icon of Hinduism...or is it something else? I am not questioning the eminence of the poem...just wanted to know :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheUnrulyWriter

7 Years Ago

Thank you for the review! Ohm was in reference to Hinduism, specifically the mantra "Om namah Shivay.. read more
Zoya

7 Years Ago

Yeah that's what I thought...you're welcome btw :)
This is an excellently-written piece of philosophy here. It had an innocence to it that gave me a good feeling throughout. Perhaps we're best as the small beings able to appreciate life, and we lose that appreciation with increasing height.

Wonderful work. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


TheUnrulyWriter

7 Years Ago

Haha maybe that's why hobbits are always so happy!! Thank you for the review :)
Asante

7 Years Ago

True! Or elves, unless you're Kreacher of the Potter series, haha. My pleasure. :)

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I write stories, poems, and songs. I am a multi-instrumentalist, and I'm always wanting to learn more of 'em. My writing is mostly abstract and focuses on psychological, philosophical, and/or spir.. more..

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