Broken Feelings

Broken dreams
Hope ripped at the seems
Nothing left inside to balance out the pain
I wonder why I’m pushing on
It all feels so wrong
I’m scared it will never be right again

Inside I keep trying
But nothings working out
So I wonder what else life has in store for me
And don’t know how to carry on
Freedoms gone away
Because things as I liked them have changed

I hate dragging this out
But it remains close yet seems and feels so distant
Everything just keeps falling in and out of me
So many holes within
The hardest part is letting go cos I don’t want to give this up

Inner confusion storms my head
If only I could explain so it could be understood
But I can’t regain control
If only you could see
Because I don’t know about you but its been hard on me

And when secret tears fall I feel weak
I should be coping being strong but I am all front
Really I’m so emotional and out of it
They only see the outside of me
They don’t see the inside with all the broken feelings hurting me

Reviews

[Kaygexx]

I love the emotion in this, and how you use the words to bring it out. Like, "Hope ripped at the seams"
and
"Inner confusion storms my head."
Definately meaningful & I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.

[Kat Plunkett]

This poem.. took the words right out of me.. How i feel now.. really good ....

[Sylo's Rose]

I like that one. but dont feel weak when you cry. I cry alot ad i still think im a b***h. tears are just a way of letting ppl know how you feel. this is a really good one. and lose of control isnt a bad thing unless your rose. then its a terrible thing. shes nuts

[A.E. Surdam]

Poetic and emotional. Enjoyed!

[Emily B]

this is pretty good stuff, it's funny how much stronger the words get when you get that rhymey stuff out of the way

[Katannaism]

'Hope ripped at the se(a)ms'...
You got me hooked by the second line!
Again, I applaud you for producing and sharing another one of your many, many amazing works!

[DearSweetAgony]

I agree with Katub,
The words do fly at you.
But instead of bullets its more like being hit with hard puffs
of air.
Your words are very strong.
And your feeling is very beautiful.
Great Job!

[Katub]

Words flying off the page hitting me like bullets well done!!

[Tasha]

I could feel your pain, as I could relate. It is very sad, but it has so much meaning and is so meaningful to the reader. Outstanding!!

[Kathryn]

your words flow brilliantly, and it's very sad and deep;. Agan, another one I can relate to. well done, keep writing :)