Need help thinking of a title, plz help

Need help thinking of a title, plz help

A Poem by TheUnforgivinFallenAngel

It starts, so they say, with a change or drift in mood, a cloud above or tarantula in the corner,
a slow knocking, dropping, drifting over to the sides of our so called society.  

A few more drinks after work, a few more smokes round the bike
sheds, a few more w****s outside of the matrimonial bedroom, nights lost in
front of WOW with dirty socks covering your phone on the floor.

Just a bit more exercise, start one day at a time, read and start to do your recycling,
who are we kidding, these people wont find their inner strength.
Meditate, breathe and don’t forget to wax your eyebrows to lift your face, 
I think I might throw up if somebody else asks me to smile, because it makes you feel better.

We are all downright lazy and many are downright depressed, but I get up everyday,
I hate the dark winters, I cant stand the way young people dress and take that can f**k off and die.
Last birthday mums boyfriend hung himself, the year before that I almost died,
Sometimes I need to be lazy, but I know I still have to deal with the next day.

I still smoke too much and I still see the beast on the horizon,
I want to go out and get high so I can dance my life away.
I hate that I am depressed and I hate that I still need to whine on about my trials,
Though somebody once told me tomorrow would be a better day.

© 2011 TheUnforgivinFallenAngel


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How about
my Fucked Up Reality?
Just the first thing to pop up in my head.


Posted 13 Years Ago


such is life, and there tons of titles that could follow this style
My broken mirror
A shattered life
or smile; it makes you weak
thats what comes off the top of my head

Posted 13 Years Ago


Hmm.. many titles can suit this dark piece.
How 'bout 'A Shriveled Tomorrow'?
Anyway, great piece-Captured the emotion well-Great work~

Posted 13 Years Ago


hmm, i'm not much good at titles, but i would be tempted by something along the lines of 'The signs of decay'. just a thought.
A brilliant poem, and you have perfectly captured what I watched my dad go through while i was small. well done :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very nice. I like. It portrays us that hide our smiles. Maybe a title, a suggestion, could be, "The Smile In the Mirror" or "Emotional Masks" ?

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Very good. A title maybe would be "Depressions of Hope" ? I don't really know. But maybe it fits. Just a suggestion :)

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on April 25, 2011
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