Alice's Mirror

I wrote this last year when my class did the Alice and Wonderland play. What do you guys think?

You can meet yourself in the mirror,
You can step inside your mind,
You can crawl on through like Alice
And reach into the otherside,
You can chase rainbows and rabbits
And paint white roses red,
But beware the creeping madness
That climbs into your bed.

You may see within your vision
An angel dressed in white,
And fall for the illusion
Of a sunrise, shining bright,
But beware the flame that melts your soul,
And brands your heart with guilt,
For in your fruitless search for romance
All that glitters is not gold.

Tea parties and soirees
Beneath the evening moonlight,
Are perfect ways of socialising
Within the shadows of the night,
But beware the screaming effigies
That live within the wine,
They taunt you with their venom
And mock your foolish pride.

Tweedle Dee and Tweedle Dum
May be vying for your hand,
But they don't reckon with the Hatter
Who's madness steals your mind,
The blood red wine your drinking
Is dripping from the mirror,
The contorted face looking back at you
Is screaming bloody terror.

Cigarettes and alcohol
And all those dirty pills you've popped,
Made a cocktail of you vanity,
So determined were you to reach the top,
Socialising, fratranising,
Rubbing shoulders with the famous,
You left your beauty behind in the mirror
As you partied with the ludicrous.

All those moonlit orgies
Have becoume a bloody farce,
Alice no longer loves you,
She's demolished your house of cards,
And the paint peals off the roses
As their petals wither and die,
You look in the shattered mirror
And mourn a wasted life.

Bang your fist against the glass,
Shatter it to pieces,
That is not you who's inside there,
It's Alice's taunting faces,
See her countless sneering mouths
And beady little eyes,
Watching you, so told you so
And laughing as you cry.

Your madness roars it's triumph
As you pick up a shattered splinter,
You lacerate your wrists to bits
As the Queen roars, "Off with her!"
Your head spins and rolls around
Searching for your soul,
The party's over, it's time to go,
Your tea has gone cold.

Reviews

[Katub]

Love this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Allie :)]

This is great imagery! Absolutely genius! And I really had to take a piss, so I didn't read the entire thing, but it sounds a little like my piece "Modern Day Cinderella!" you should should check it out!

[Kathryn]

brilliant imagery, and an awesome peice. well done :)

[☯]

Such visualization! Marvelous piece. :)

[State of Grace]

This is epic! Fantastic piece! :)

[A.E. Surdam]

Beautiful, just beautiful.

[~Lizzy♬]

woah! this is amazing! :o

~lizzard~