Death

I see the world
It is pulling me
I fall down, down, down
Waiting until I hit the bottom

I see light being reborn
I watch the world as it gets closer
Why can't I stop feeling like this?

I am standing on a cracked cliff
And I watch as it crumbles around me
Not being able to move
Only seeing flashes of faces and colors

I spin out of control falling again
Never able to rest

Reviews

[DearSweetAgony]

I am standing on a cracked cliff
And I watch as it crumbles around me
Not being able to move
Only seeing flashes of faces and colors


I LOVE this line!
Great,great job!

[Kathryn]

brilliant emotion and imagery, and much more delecate an precise that the traditional view of death. Well done :)

[Tasha]

This had such amazing imagery. I liked this a lot.

[A.E. Surdam]

Great imagery. I really liked this.

[State of Grace]

This reminds me of a book I read once O.o Awesome write! :)