Destroyed

With every slow heart beat

It shatters more and more

A broken heart

Cant even explain it

 

The tears dont help

The blood wont drain

The love I once had

For you

 

I died

Came back to life

Without my heart

 

My heart is burning

In the deepest part if hell

With every agony

I now have

 

Even with my memories

It can not satisfy

That one hole

That you left

 

My soul is locked

Away in your heart

Never to return to me

For I gave it to you

 

It doesnt matter

How much I try

Each memory

Cuts in me deeper

 

You have took it all

My soul

My heart

My personality

 

I am now Destroyed

 

 

Reviews

[Katannaism]

6th stanza should be 'soul', instead of sould. Proofreading and double checking are crucial in Lit. But this is a very good piece. A very dark, tragic write written in such a beautiful, sad manner. A very excellent piece indeed. Just throw in some ellipses here and there to really make it pop. ;)

[A.E. Surdam]

Very good. I liked it. Glad I read. Emotional.

[Sylo's Rose]

nice nice

[*~DreamDeamon~*]

I like the stealing of the personality cuz once someone takes your heart and your soul you change you change your once happy personality ton something sad and depressing. good write

[Katub]

Wow...no other words really. Its an amazing write that's for sure. I could feel the pain as i read it. Well done.

[NickyGL]

"In the deepest part if hell" is if suppose to be of? well any way this poem was deep, sad.... emotional. I liked it, but i feel bad for that pain. Its not a good feeling, no one should go threw it.

[TheUnforgivinFallenAnge..]

If you read more of my poems you would understand my writings better. My explaination for things only come out in physical emotions. But they werent stolen. They were emotionaly destroyed.

[disconnectedspirit]

just wondering how one steals a personality, and how they discovered that information? was it done in a very bad way...I mean the discoveries on that soul? was their reasons they found out about that person? just wondering...

[disconnectedspirit]

sad story..wow..I am sorry to hear you feel that way, is parts of your personality need working on which is they are only concerned for your general over all ending? how does one steal ones personality, how did they find out so much about that soul? was it done in a deceitful manner, a miracle or how did they take a personality?