Off to the Ball

Poem written for contest and to let out my silly side.

Falling down, into the darkness

I had the thought, 

"Oh No! My gown!"

 

Landing hard, upon the muck

I muttered aloud,

"Hmpff, Just my luck"

 

With dress in hands and missing pieces

I began to shout,

"I Hate Those Damn Meeses" 

Author's Note

meeses = mice...I wanted to be silly and its a term I've heard before and fit my rhyme, lol...so there...no pings about the term please

Reviews

[Donna M. Burr]

lol. Very silly and, personally, I like using "meeses" sometimes too just to confuse people. My husband is so used to it he knows what I am talking about now. Anyway, I liked the poem, and I can see the silliness in it you were trying to accomplish. Good writing!

[Justaguy]

Was not there a cartoon back in the day...(and when I say back, for me I mean WAY back...lol) that had a cat saying something like "I love those meeses to pieces"? Its on the tip of my mind...lol. Anyway, very cute and funny. Well done!

[The Uncommon Muse]

LOL...bonus points to you for catching that! Yes there was and that is where I got the term from!

[Justaguy]

I love bonus points!...lol

[The Uncommon Muse]

It was from Pixie and Dixie and Mr. Jinks

[Justaguy]

Sure was! Well done!

[LeaMarie]

This is like a fairy tale..makes me think of Cinderella. I love "meeses." Rip those meeses to pieces!

[♍ Kirstin ♎]

Lol I enjoyed this. 'Twas amusing, and suited to a hyper silly mode. Like the rhyme as well =D

[add459]

im not sure how meeces could nmake you fall. they must have been very big. did you step on them? and, why were they at a ball? were they dancing? fancifull indeed. the last two stanzas have a bit of a ryme scheme, but the first does not. why? although i like the internal ryme of the first. thats nice. im wondering why the text is centered. lots of floks seem to do this. why? just "looks" cool ? i like the narritive quality of it. any poem i read on this site that is not about love lost, wnating to die, or some other such deeply personal crisis is a breath of fresh air

[MiidniightSoul]

I like this one a lot. It has a playful, silly and cute. tone. Very good.

[Alice_In_WhateverLand]

oh i liked this :) Very silly, playful fun type of thing going on :) x

[Jonathan Ballam]

If I had landed in mud, (and had to rhyme with muck) I would have used a far more powerful word, hehehe. 'Just my luck' I use when I do something like spill my tea...

*washes out his potty mouth*

Two Thumbs Up :D

[sayandeep kundu]

ha ha.. great work .. :)

[Carolina Kel]

Very short and cute. I like it.

[Mauricio Montoya]

short and funny, lol, nice work