Is This A Dream?

Poem about longing for the one you love. It was written based on my own feelings and longing.

Alone, as the day turns into night,

My soul burns, to feel your guiding light.

Upon the horizon a vision does appear

My blood thunders, as it slowly draws near.

Is this a dream?

 

Is it you? Or do I dream too much?

My fingers ache, to reach out and touch,

The vision that stands, before my eyes,

As the sun sinks silently and says its good-byes.

Is this a dream?

 

My heart stutters, drawn to your heat

My pulse racing, as our eyes do meet

Though we are silent, so much is said

And the sky that was once blue, now burns red.

Is this a dream?

 

Do you truly, before me stand?

Or will you slip, through the palm of my hand?

Into your arms, I am slowly drawn

With the hope I shall remain, until the dawn

Is this a dream?

Reviews

[Donna M. Burr]

Wow! Powerful, deep, and sent chills up my arms. I loved the emotion, the rhyming is an bonus feature in the writing which I liked (though a poem doesn't have to rhyme to convey meaning, I just loved rhymes lol). It is a wonderfully written piece which I definitely am adding to my library.

[Justaguy]

Has anyone ever told you that you have a knack for this?...lol. Seriously, I really liked this one. Felt as if from the heart.

[The Uncommon Muse]

Gosh you are going to make me blush ...thank you so much

[Justaguy]

if you are going to write like this, you have to take the praise...lol

[EmpressPoetess]

Enchantingly beautiful! I love the repeated phrase "is this a dream?" and the dreamy way you write. great job and it gets my vote!

The love we have can feel like it was an illusion once it's gone.

[abhas]

your emotions rhyme in this as well... living in a fear of losing the one for you... trying to be there with that person... and getting lost in these thoughts all the time... nice write... so let the work progress...

[RDOriginal]

This is so descriptive of the feelings you have when you truly love someone and need them to be near. When your emotions are so in tune and it is almost as if you can barely believe they are real and like in the poem you keep asking yourself, "Is this a dream?". Maybe it's because deep down so many of us believe we're not worth such perfect love (fleeting or otherwise).
You have a lot of heart imagery in here (heart burning/stuttering and pulse thundering/racing). I'm wondering whether that might be a little too much in four stanzas? Only a suggestion of course, I've never written something similar so I'm far from an expert and probably being too clinical in my analysis.
I think the rhyme scheme works particularly well as it keeps up a moderate pace without becoming painfully melodramatic. This suits the fact that the content of this poem is full of genuine passion rather than one of those great, floral efforts that often prove that the poet owns a thousand text books on literary style but doesn't know a jot about love and life!

[NinjaPi]

this is amazing. you have sych away with words. this has beautiful imagery. it is poetic perfection.

[MiidniightSoul]

I love this poem. So deep, powerful. Very beautiful written. " Do you truly, before me stand? Or will you slip, through the palm of my hand? Into your arms, I am slowly drawn." This is my favorite line, so beautiful. Amazing.

[sayandeep kundu]

Screaming dream.

[Alice_In_WhateverLand]

I loved this poem! It made me long and yearn for the long lost lover ive never had! lol it is very well written :)