A Diary of Regret

I was inspired to write this by the movie Carlito's Way. It's about ways that life can never turn out like you always wished. It's very short i know, but it says alot in my opinion.

I did my time, wasted it good and proper. Now i'm going to tell you i'm a changed man, but that's not the case. I got my nickels and dimes out of living on the wild side, but what good is it, when no one knows you anymore? People change, and if you don't change with them, you're gonna get left behind. I ain't got nobody to brag to about the life i'm living, hell i don't think i would even if i could. Money and b*****s, that's all you hear about. It's being glorified like it matters, but it doesn't, you realize that when you go to prison. You start beating yourself up about things you should have done before you went inside, things you shouldn't have done and things you should have done more often. Slowly strolling down memory lane, back to the good old days, days of fresh air and proper food. After a year or so, once you've driven yourself crazy about those things, you start seeing, that satisfaction is overrated. You can't get enough, it's not possible, there's always something left to do or see, wether you were planning it or not.

Reviews

[Matthew James Ginn]

The story has a well developed character with a distinct voice and personality. With this realistic character, it was simple enjoyable to read. However, I do not know whether this was a contruction of your own or a similar character of Carlitos Way. The structure was also very well presented. It did not bounce around but has a purposeful path. I like the way it smoothly moved and flowed nicely. However, the character development was cut before it could be fully seen. The story ended before the reader had a full grasp of the vividness you want the reader to see. Add a simple backstory, or a memory. The jargon is equisite but it kinda lacks full development.

[Áki Petersen]

thanks for the feedback, really appreciate it :) I've been thinking about making it into a short story or even longer. I thought about it maybe being too short and suddenly cut off like that, but i guess sometimes i'm too quick to just put an end to what i've written when the words don't come to me right away, i'm not too good at waiting and putting time into it. But i'll definetely be trying my best to make it longer and not get off track.
Again, thanks for the feedback and i'm glad you liked it :)