Look Me In The Eyes

You tell me that I'm more than what you ever wished I could be,

then you turn your back and say you wish there was more to what you see.

Don't you think it frustrates me too?

How you look at me like I'm not good enough for you.

I see it in your eyes, you try to hide it behind a smile.

It hurts that I haven't seen your real smile in a while.

It's been years since I could show you mine.

I'd be lyin' if I told you I was fine.

Look me in the eyes and tell me you don't see the hurt..

Never knew that I could be destroyed with just a few simple words.

Author's Note

Finally got my poetic inspiration back........it's been a while, but I think I'm back in the swing of things. Cheers.

Reviews

[James O'Rourke]

Great poem. I enjoy the rhythm of the poem. Longer lines followed shorter ones. Almost gave me a sense of waves, which furthered the emotion being invoked in this piece. The rhyming added a nice flow to it as well, easy to follow.

I do agree that it can be confused for a poem about a boyfriend or husband. Perhaps work a little on the clarity of the topic. That may lessen the confusion. It could be intentional or accidental. Open interpretations are one of my favorite things about poetry. Everyone's perspective is different.

Overall, a good piece. I enjoyed it very much. Thanks for sharing with us.

[Suicide Squad Girl♥]

Thank you, James for your review!! Very useful & much appreciated!

[Jamestown]

Many couples get to this point, that you speak of unfortunately!
Relationships are tough, but so worth the bumps if your with
the right person, hang tough and good luck, thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Suicide Squad Girl♥]

Haha, this isn't about my relationship with my guy, actually. This was about something between me and a family member who lost a mutually important person in our lives. Thanks for your review though!! :)