No More Lies

Hidden emotions and things left unsaid.

Tell me not of how you love me nor hold me as I cry,
I find no comfort in your laughter and all your gentle lies.
I see what you are hiding and I know this to be true.
Bury all the whispers of your heart you like,
but I can hear it calling for something more to life.
Tell me, dear. (Oh, will you?)
When will this come to end?
I ask not for you to shed your darkness, nor let in all the light,
but do not try to continue on deceiving in the night.

Reviews

[Trigorin]

You have a good concept but some of your language choice is a little expected and bland. Overall this is very typical and there's really nothing to distinguish it from any of the other gobs of poetry on this topic - you need some kind of hook that'll keep the audience reading.

[BarefootWings]

Thank you for the advice and the review. I'll remember to try to have something they can connect with next time.

[CzatoftheMoon]

Well its very interesting