You

 

Seeing you, it doesn’t kill me.

Hearing you still makes me smile.

Learning more about you thrills me,

understanding your artistic style.

Sharing with you all things new,

figuring out your bemused thought,

comprehending the shifting hue,

watching as each bright shade fought.

 

The color of your name has dimmed,

the letters comprising it grown smaller;

now my idea-you is only skimmed

and your name inside’s no longer hollered

with exuberance and jubilation;

instead, it’s dropped, as if in passing.

Oh love dimmed by blown expectation,

snared by dark thoughts that are massing,

why, good sir, your change of heart?

Why on earth’d you change your mind?

I’d rather you said at the start

you were not wanting to be mine.

 

Do you sense the problem here?

Much as I’d love to say I’m fine

I cannot stand to have you near

for just a little bit more time.

I want to break you, yell and scream,

but touching you could cause me pain;

these thought should remain just dreams,

not acted upon, leave soul unstained.

 

So pardon my mild craziness,

but it is YOU who causes my distress.

Reviews

[Katherine Wyatt]

I have one of these..brilliant..how I loved to exchange ides and listen to him he was so brilliant..Fortunately he has been gone years now..As we tried to be friends I had to eliminate that as he was so cruel at times..
You have caught something universal and very intimate here..what wonderful piece!

[Jae]

awsomful

[alyssafree]

I really liked it, I could feel the emotions put in it. It's the truth and when we want to discover truth, we must be truthful ourselves.

[Jessica M.]

"The color of your name has dimmed"
amazing image,
a very nice read.

[BearTears60]

Passionate and strong start. The ending built up like a red hot fire, but fizzled at the end. Like so many bad relationships i've been apart of the passion ends towards the end. But last two lines have an unfinished feeling. "mild craziness" diminished to "distress" doesn't do your feelings or poem's passion justice. but before that were the words and women of my past....great poem.

[Margaret Barton-Wahl]

"YOU" is very interesting. The rhymes are good and the story it tells is one that everyone can relate to. Love that makes you crazy.
I enjoyed reading it with the similes and strong angry passion. It is a danger to love this strongly and the ending gives a hint of this.
All in all I found it to be a good piece of writing and well worth the read.The ups and down feelings and insanity of love is always an enigma.
Good Job! I will be looking forward to reading more of your work in the future.
Peace&Love be with you... Margaret Barton-Wahl

[bluessadmood]

yes sometimes we just fall for some one who is great in everything ,he will break our heart he will mess with our mind ,he will keep us longing to have him back ,but he seemed to have his way far ,to have always to keep away its sad but thats how it is ,we want something someone ,but he is just not the one who will always be here one of the paradoxes of life ,i have known it always,this is nice this beautiful...

[Lacinius]

oh wow. this is like, screaming at me. its almost exactly what im going through. wow. deffinitely good job.

[alicia]

this poem speaks alot. i could relate to it. its true and to the point. i liked how it felt like you were talking directly to that person.

[Leah]

last line was a killer.