You

 

Seeing you, it doesn’t kill me.

Hearing you still makes me smile.

Learning more about you thrills me,

understanding your artistic style.

Sharing with you all things new,

figuring out your bemused thought,

comprehending the shifting hue,

watching as each bright shade fought.

 

The color of your name has dimmed,

the letters comprising it grown smaller;

now my idea-you is only skimmed

and your name inside’s no longer hollered

with exuberance and jubilation;

instead, it’s dropped, as if in passing.

Oh love dimmed by blown expectation,

snared by dark thoughts that are massing,

why, good sir, your change of heart?

Why on earth’d you change your mind?

I’d rather you said at the start

you were not wanting to be mine.

 

Do you sense the problem here?

Much as I’d love to say I’m fine

I cannot stand to have you near

for just a little bit more time.

I want to break you, yell and scream,

but touching you could cause me pain;

these thought should remain just dreams,

not acted upon, leave soul unstained.

 

So pardon my mild craziness,

but it is YOU who causes my distress.

Reviews

[Katherine Wyatt]

I have one of these..brilliant..how I loved to exchange ides and listen to him he was so brilliant..Fortunately he has been gone years now..As we tried to be friends I had to eliminate that as he was so cruel at times..
You have caught something universal and very intimate here..what wonderful piece!

[Brandon M. Mitchell]

This poem made me speechless... I absolutely loved it! The word placement was amazing and the tone and mood were very emotional! I know that nobody can ever be perfect, but you are perfect! Please keep writing

[Adam M. Snow]

I love this

[BrokenPaladin]

I know the feeling

[Kaitlyn "Sparki" Kenne..]

LOVE IT!
It has So much, Passion. I just loved it when I read the first line.

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

"So pardon my mild craziness,
but it is YOU who causes my distress."

Omg, I can relate to this line so much! Love it! The poem was great. ;p

[Speechless Shadow]

this is a very good piece. Keep up the great work! :)

[skribbles33]

Very simple and yet the words twist it for profound metaphors of which one can easily relate to. Nice piece.

[Ruth]

Nicely expressed friend! I love the flow to this piece and the honesty to it :) Poppy xx

[Nayan]

Wao! Such nice use of words to express what one feels for another... I truely love your poetry Molly! Thanks for sharing :)

[Hello, Goodbye]

Fantastic Poetry..