Into The Darkness

I wrote this when I was very depressed. I do not like being depressed so I fight it by writing down how I feel. It always helps.

All around, the storm clouds gather.

My fear grows as an avenging shadow 

falls against my naked soul.

It grips, and darkly tugs at my essence.

It strikes me, and wounds my soul. 

As my life drips to the wicked earth that is my prison.

In a frenzy I feel like running, 

I cry out, Why?!

While Death's shadow looms over me, 

and taking my unwilling hand.

Now alone, 

my fervent pleas fall upon blind eyes.

This is my doom, 

a never ending dread, hell. 

I follow nothing but smoke, 

down deeper into my mood.

Author's Note

Please be nice, I will not respond to rude or mean comments. Please if you can't say anything nice, then don't say anything at all. Thank you.

Reviews

[Jordan]

I feel it dries too hard to be "dark" and just comes across as "Mom! Where's the black nail polish?! I need to impress the girl who works at Hot Topic!"

It's not very genuine is my point. It's not bad, but the insincerity takes away from it.

[Amanda]

First I wasn't trying to please anyone by writing this. I was very honest and too the point with sharing my emotions. I don't know how anyone could say it wasn't genuine unless you never suffered depression before, I would understand your point then. Also I was writing from my own experience not my reader's. Oh and I wouldn't try to impress any girl because I don't go for girls or hot topic. LOL Thank you for your review and the time you took. :-) I hope I wasn't to blunt but I found your comment a bet rude and I don't understand some words you used. I am talking about the word (dries) I don't know if you made an error or not. Thank you again for your time.

[Jordan]

I did. It should be tries. And I wasn't trying to be rude. I apologize if it offended you. I'm not the best at wording things "nicely" sometimes.

[Amanda]

I thought so it's all good. I sometimes don't understand things very well so I might be not understand what you're trying to say. Though I laughed when you said hot topic and a girl hahaha. I hate hot topic I liked it back in the day when it was more punk. I think though I do understand a bet of what you said, I think I did over play some emotion's in this one but depression is like that makes everything more drama and drawn out. I just was trying to share that through my writing. how I see it is that not everyone will understand it nor like. That's okay because we all have different ideals and opinions and that make's us unique and special. :-)

[SAYED THANGAL]

Highly passionate and tragic feelings put forth through the poem.It has the powrer to transform the readers to a particular state, to a mood that can't express how
All the best, syed.India

[Amanda]

Thank you, at the when I wrote this I suffered deep depression so there were very heavy emotions for me to deal with. I am just glad it's over with and that I was able to write this.

[SAYED THANGAL]

Most welcme