Tough position No transmission On a mission To my vision I am livin' Through the static Automatic Blur... White fuzz White noise My life No toy Skin's pale Dying breed No color I'm in need Of a savior I'm so close I'm so far I'm almost In the light Out of sight It's too bright to see... Smell the flowers Give me color Skin so bare I'm so cold Past the hours Give another Do I dare Sell my soul?
For something you "just wrote", jeez... I'm going to tell you something. Your mind has the gift of thinking rhythms and thinking lyrics and you can see that here as clear as in the rest of the things you write, you have a gift and I can see that your getting your work out there. I'm not just saying this to say this, but I seriously think you could make it writing lyrics or poetry or one of the two if you chose to.
A power-punch of lyricism, thick with attitude and wit. This musically pounds like a strong bass-line, rhythmically beating in time with the soul. So strongly does this piece parallel the sense of the image that it accompanies, that it seems as though the image was created to accompany the poem rather than the other way round...
Damn good.
Very rythmical. I think you have less faith in teh ablities you are gifted with this is fantastic.
You have created a very heart wrenching tale from a picture that is a true talent. And i greatly enjoyed readnig your piece
I love how simple this is. But the rhythm and meaning behind it blows me away. This is some really, really good work. This actually kind of reminds me of rapid-fire raps, it goes by really quickly but there's enough meaning in there to last a lifetime.
Beautiful artwork and I like the flow of thoughts in this poem. It said so much in so few words. To sell your soul can lead to pleasure for a moment. Do we pay later? No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote
Another nice piece. I love your rapid fire pacing. I always hear music whenever I read your work. This time a crying Gibson. Both its humbuckers laying out a fast flowing riff of bent chords and vibrato.
One of these days you're going to have to give me something to correct. Or not :)
I love picture prompts myself. I have 4 pieces posted if you care to have a peek. Jason, Jennifer, Harlot and Tears.
For something you "just wrote", jeez... I'm going to tell you something. Your mind has the gift of thinking rhythms and thinking lyrics and you can see that here as clear as in the rest of the things you write, you have a gift and I can see that your getting your work out there. I'm not just saying this to say this, but I seriously think you could make it writing lyrics or poetry or one of the two if you chose to.