Sell My Soul (Image 15)

Sell My Soul (Image 15)

A Poem by TheReal
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Poem for 'Picture This' Group Contest

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Tough position
No transmission
On a mission
To my vision
I am livin'
Through the static
Automatic Blur...
White fuzz
White noise
My life
No toy
Skin's pale
Dying breed
No color
I'm in need
Of a savior
I'm so close
I'm so far
I'm almost
In the light
Out of sight
It's too bright to see...
Smell the flowers
Give me color
Skin so bare
I'm so cold
Past the hours
Give another
Do I dare
Sell my soul?

© 2012 TheReal


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TheReal
Something I Just Wrote.

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For something you "just wrote", jeez... I'm going to tell you something. Your mind has the gift of thinking rhythms and thinking lyrics and you can see that here as clear as in the rest of the things you write, you have a gift and I can see that your getting your work out there. I'm not just saying this to say this, but I seriously think you could make it writing lyrics or poetry or one of the two if you chose to.

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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very expressive and fits the picture nicely, like a prostitute desiring another life but has no other choice.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A power-punch of lyricism, thick with attitude and wit. This musically pounds like a strong bass-line, rhythmically beating in time with the soul. So strongly does this piece parallel the sense of the image that it accompanies, that it seems as though the image was created to accompany the poem rather than the other way round...
Damn good.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheReal

12 Years Ago

Wow! Thank you very much. Very, very much!
if you 'just wrote' this, oh god i can't wait to see your other writings...this is so amazing!!!!:-):-):-):-D.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheReal

12 Years Ago

Thanks sooo much :)
Very rythmical. I think you have less faith in teh ablities you are gifted with this is fantastic.
You have created a very heart wrenching tale from a picture that is a true talent. And i greatly enjoyed readnig your piece

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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If you 'just wrote' this, then keep on 'just writing'! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AMAZING!!!!!! I like the strong words you put into the peom. you serously got talent for writing. :-D
rating 100/100 O:-)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love how simple this is. But the rhythm and meaning behind it blows me away. This is some really, really good work. This actually kind of reminds me of rapid-fire raps, it goes by really quickly but there's enough meaning in there to last a lifetime.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheReal

12 Years Ago

Thank you :) it really means alot!
Beautiful artwork and I like the flow of thoughts in this poem. It said so much in so few words. To sell your soul can lead to pleasure for a moment. Do we pay later? No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Another nice piece. I love your rapid fire pacing. I always hear music whenever I read your work. This time a crying Gibson. Both its humbuckers laying out a fast flowing riff of bent chords and vibrato.

One of these days you're going to have to give me something to correct. Or not :)

I love picture prompts myself. I have 4 pieces posted if you care to have a peek. Jason, Jennifer, Harlot and Tears.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

For something you "just wrote", jeez... I'm going to tell you something. Your mind has the gift of thinking rhythms and thinking lyrics and you can see that here as clear as in the rest of the things you write, you have a gift and I can see that your getting your work out there. I'm not just saying this to say this, but I seriously think you could make it writing lyrics or poetry or one of the two if you chose to.

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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