LOVE LOVES NO ONE

Taking a leap
Can't even speak
Cause I'm falling in love
Falling so deep
Is this a dream or is this life
Because I'm falling a steep
Steep hill
Narrow thoughts
As I fall to your feet
And I'm yelling out "I love you"
At the instant we meet
Is it possible I'm falling
Cause your smile is sweet?
Cause your eyes are so promising?
Cause my heart is so weak?
Cause my heart has been beat,
To the point that it bleeds,
To the point of confusion,
It don't know what it needs...
Cause my sight has been stolen
I don't know what I see
But they say love is blind
So who knows if it's me
Maybe love is just crazy
So I've fallen at ease
And I need it so bad
That I'm calling to plead
And it's no longer wanted
It's becoming a need
Now I'm aiming to please
So I don't see you leave
And I'm hitting the ground
Cause you didn't receive
All the love I had given
Now I'm broke and deceived
And I'm all cracked open
While you're only relieved
And I'm paying for falling
While you're floating a breeze
Now I'll never love to love
Cause love don't love me.

Author's Note

What do you think? Just something I wrote as I went.

Reviews

[Persephone]

You did a spectacular job here! I love how the poem goes from how you are taking a leap then through the whole cycle and down to the last where your heart is broken....it really is like that...and sometimes happens that quickly...you have a real talent, thanks for sharing :)

[TheReal]

Thank you so much! :)

[bryandc15]

Wonderful poem .... I love the rhymes and so your title .... Very intriguing ...

[Speak in Silence]

This is a wonderful piece, I love how you rhymed. But I think this would actually be better in my contest called Betrayal. But good luck :)

[Coyote Poetry]

"Now I'll never love to love
Cause love don't love me."
A amazing poem. Hell to be in love and the love is a one way street. I like the description of desire and feeling of sadness in the poem. A perfect ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[TheReal]

Thank you :) I appreciate the feedback more than you'd imagine!

[Donni]

aw, this reminds me of how quickly I could fall in love in my youth, instant and hard. thanks for the memories.

[Keith]

I had never given poetry much thought, but you and another here are giving me a true appreciation of the depth of feeling take can flow from the heart and onto the keyboard.
I am impressed and thankful.
Keep up the superb work!

[Ramya]

There is this lovely flow in this piece. Good choice of words. To use rhymes in a long poem like this one is a feat!

Good job!!:)

[Brittany]

Loved it. It has a beat and rhythm that is pleasing. The words are well written. I enjoyed everything about it. Great job.