The Phoenix

My fires don't discriminate 
And I burn who I touch
I don't aim to hurt
But that doesn't mean much
My plumage is flame
And my inners are ashen
They say I'm of beauty 
But I'm lacking compassion
I'd burn this whole world
If I could be loved by the cinders
I am happy when I'm dust 
But I am reborn a sinner

Author's Note

Please let me know what you think!

Reviews

[Sebastian Falzarano]

The poem is powerful, well written, and says a lot about life. My favorite line is "If I could be loved by the cinders/I am happy when I am dust/But I am reborn as a sinner". I don't know why, it's just that the line stands out to me. I am pretty sure that the whole message of the poem is that people can change and be rebirthed, exactly like a phoenix. Great job!

[Rene Salinas]

Here I go Amanda I hope I do better than the last one as you let me know I was close but "No - cigar".
I easily relate to the comparision of the Phoenix and the internal yearning. The fire (Of love I assume ) doe not differentiate. And sometimes maybe you try too hard. And everything going swimmingly until lacking in compassion which threw me off. Is that mean as in "No mercy"? Compassion as in the abhility to understand whats needed and not wanted right? This love irradiates clearly. But every time that the feeling is brought back in there lies the choice hence the sinner.

Nice depiction if....

Thankyou

[The Protagonist]

I understand where you're coming from completely! The character is meant to be the kind of person who has always wanted love but has not quite learned what love really means and this depicts the character's conflicts when trying to work out where they are going wrong.
"They say I'm of beauty, but I'm lacking compassion," explains how others think that the character is beautiful, but they do not see themselves that way - they consider themselves selfish and wear a mask of apathy because they do not believe they can be loved. They are unwaveringly stuck in their ways, you see, unable to recognise the change they must make.
The end of the poem is them deciding that they would rather be invisible to the world - or dead - than continue as they are, unloved. Thanks again for your interest :)