Please Check my attempt

Try to try

Acrostic

"I tried Haiku"

In the midst of courageous night

 

Trying my dexterity at Haiku,

Resting luck at you,

I may not land on mark

Ethos may bury in park,

Dying down like spark

 

Hindrances may evolve in style,

Arousing innumerable pile,

In spite of it, I have written,

Knowing & filing petition,

You all will help with precision.   .

Haiku (5-7-5) ….

 

HAIKU - 1

Blossoming Flower

Resembles your serene face

Erases my pain

 

HAIKU - 2

Cloudy thoughts thrill soul,

Darkness decipher Freedom

Develop courage

 

HAIKU - 3

Electrifying

Flawless courage rolls soul,

 Defeating Devil

Author's Note

Tried my hand first time at haiku , help me in understand it more deeply ....... thanksss...:-)

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Your efforts seems sophtistacted, comprising of consie wisdom enough, very good! But I really enjoyed your poem about attempting Haiku, such clarity in your writing, thanks.

[may]

Great Attempt ! I loved the intro :)

dont have much knowledge about haiku , but i loved the three of them :)

[Suditi]

The introduction poem is amazing! :P
The haikus are awesome.
I dont have much technical knowledge..but they were creative and spot on.
To me, a great read. :D

[Manpreet]

It is a good attempt but it is some how missing the punch in it. you need to convey a very sharp emotion in those few lines. This is what I feel about it.

[Coyote Poetry]

You did very well. I have trouble keeping poetry under a thousand words. Take talent to express a poem in so few words. I like all three of the haiku's. My favorite was number two. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Michael G.]

I would say your first attempt was successful.
A little play on "you" in your acrostic, otherwise well done.
Good work, sir.