Our Marriage

A dream come true.... .... for true lovers

 

A stunning day arrives with stunning pace,

That seat was too comfortable to wait,

Eyes were glued at the entrance,

From where our distance will abate.

Today is our day,

We are tying the knot,

Life will dissolve in love,

Our togetherness will seal the slot.

 

As my eyes met your sensuous figure,

A smile lighted up in a flash,

You were so red in color,

I thought your body got a gash.

 

You were approaching towards your life,

Slowly and steadily, looking down,

Your shyness was wrapping your face,

You were looking most gorgeous in the town.

 

That red sari was looking splendid,

As if a doll wrapped in envelop,

Your cheeks were so bubbly and pink,

A feel of restlessness was starting to develop.

 

You came to me and we sat together,

That moment was a dream come true,

You were quietly sitting & smiling,

And your outrageous beauty looking anew.

 

Now it’s time to take an oath,

To love and live forever mutually,

Those seven religious rounds of fire,

Concealed our world together with integrity.

 

Now I was yours & you were mine,

We completed first chapter of adore,

“We will love forever” we pledged,

Still numerous hugs were in store.

 

This ceremony was the proof,

Of our trust, truth and care,

Our true love got its destination,

Now our sweet home will get its flair.

 

Everybody danced to our ceremony,

It was a memorable atmosphere,

Our lives fused as one,

 We were happy uphill seventh sphere.

Author's Note

Do give me your reviews about this poem.......................... this is a poem from my upcoming book....

Reviews

[Michael G.]

Overall, a good piece.
It's an enjoyable, easy to read poem.
Good flow and you tell the story well.
I might change a few things, but then, that's me... I'm not the writer.

[Manpreet]

Beautiful poem! It seems as if you are narrating what you are experiencing yourself. I look forward to reading your book.

[Cathy Wattam]

A very descriptive poem, full of emotion. There are however, a couple of questionable lines that for me don't flow and watch the tenses in the piece.

Also - "Now I was your & you were mine," - I think that should say "yours and you were mine".

Overall, I liked it. There are some great descriptions but I feeel it could do with a bit of "housekeeping".