My proposal

" Proposal"

A face so cute & so sexy,

It’s Irresistible to take off the eyes,

Cheeks are so bubbly like a kid,

It’s raining flower in each of your smiles,

 

I am a fan of your brown catlike eyes,

Your sweet lips tempt me to kiss,

You are my beautiful queen,

Every touch of you is a feel of bliss.

 

My nose still breathe your breadth,

 Delicate ears hear your whisper,

I just love you incessantly,

You are the resurrection of my power

 

When I hold your hand it feels like heaven,

Every thought has an unexplained sensation to add,

I am completely bizarre in passion,

Just a glimpse of you makes me mad.

 

You are the diamond of my world,

Essential like air to live,

My dexterously pliable body,

Anxiously waiting……..what your lips will give.

 

I want to wear your attire,

Dissolving in your eyes of heaven,

Your one touch sublimes my sanity,

Together we will surpass seas counting “one to seven”.

 

I will just say three words with assurance in all,

I am lost just because “I love you”,

Consider this as my first & last propose to you “My life”,

Please answer --- Do you love me too???

Author's Note

what do you say.................will she say Yes....after reading this ;-)

Reviews

[Renée]

Well if she doesn't.. I will ! ...lol joking... It was breathtaking !
only a few minor adjustments mentioned by Cathy Wattam

[Cathy Wattam]

I'm sure she will say yes. Who wouldn't after hearing this poem?

However, some errors I'm afraid:-
"It’s raining flower in each of your smiles," - "flowers"
"My nose still breathe your breadth," - "breathes"
"Consider this as my first & last propose to you “My life”," - "proposal"

Keep writing........

[Thea]

Aw...So touching! Haha! I can feel that you wrote this with heart! XD
The flow was great...
i enjoyed reading this! Keep it up!
:)))

[Manpreet]

Vow! if this cannot melt the lady then I would say do not settle for any less. These are the words that can melt any ice maiden... go for it boy!

[Chesney W.]

this is so beautiful.. i have a feeling she will say yes!!..

[Suditi]

Obviously she will say yes!
The most beautiful proposal ever!
The best thing about this poem is that it is sweet, very very sweet. But it is not cheesy. :D
Amazing. :)

[Cassie Fraga]

SHE BETTER SAY YES!!!!
this was such a touching read.... ooooooohhhhh how I love it!!!

[reflectingus]

Haha, you should read this poem to her. I love the loyal love, and how you describe her. Also, the rhyming makes it great to read. Proposing a girl can be nerve wracking, I guess, but then, the girl loves it when the guy is honest and tells her the truth lol. The whole poem is really nice to read, though, just one thing, in the 3rd stanza, shouldn't "My nose still breathe your breadth" be "my nose still breathes your breath"? Maybe that's a typo, nevertheless, great poem, keep writing.

[MusicLover]

You are a fantastic writer

[Marie]

Surely she will say "yes--just write me a poem every day."