Searching Identity

Few questions to search identity..........

I am still in a mess

am I born with a body and a soul?

if I am a body , I know myself,

but if I am soul too then what is my goal?

 

Am I just a boy or more than that,

Just confused with my identity,

Am I a thing to be used,

or a precious creation of vanity.

 

Am I love of nature,

Created to spread smiles,

Or I am a slave of covetousness,

Perplexed between numerous styles

 

I am still in a fix of life,

where I relate self with material,

I have no price tag with me,

but everything else for me is a monistic cereal.

 

I am lost in greed and deed for lust,

Trouncing everyone out off my way,

I want to be a king of world,

where thoughts doesn’t sway.

 

I am doing things as it is,

Understanding nothing from deep,

I create nothing for lives,

But inside me has 1000 pains to keep.

 

So when will I get my true identity,

When I will be freed from this jar,

I want to be free from tears,

Give me my identity, leave me,

Why me yaar?

 

Author's Note

Yaar* ................ means...Friend....................................This is a poem from my book Why Me Yaar*

Reviews

[$êlvån]

"I am doing things as it is,
Understanding nothing from deep,
I create nothing for lives,
But inside me has 1000 pains to keep."
loved this one....

but "So when will I get my true identity,
When I will be freed from this jar,
I want to be free from tears,
Give me my identity, leave me,
Why me yaar?
"seems like a odd para...can you pls make it bit clear.i mean watsd relation btween giving identity and leaving free?

anyways nyc write with couple of great words

[Suditi]

Its so frustrating, right? To not know of our identity.. To not be able to define ourselves.. To possess all those ambitions, yet unable to possess an identity.

Am I love of nature,
Created to spread smiles,
Or I am a slave of covetousness,
Perplexed between numerous styles

My favorite stanza :D

[R.A. Youngblood]

This is very nice and enigmatic poem! I really enjoyed this... Thanks for sharing (:

[Thea]

A really great poem...I love the topic on this one...You've created this with such wonderful words...Well done!
:)))

[Renée]

You express yourself very well ( :

[poeticpiers]

I found your work interesting but read aloud it does not flow as smoothly as it should. You have a talent obviously but need to work on your meter.In some places your words seem disjointed
But never the less you held my interest start to finish

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Thought provoking, inspiring piece.

I am doing things as it is,
Understanding nothing from deep,
I create nothing for lives,
But inside me has 1000 pains to keep.
----------that really stood out for me. Nice write!

[Dominique]

I love it, it gives you something to truly think about.

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Oh really amazing! i would like to read your book too!I loved the music and rhythm of the poem..The human identity is always basic topic to think and understand! soul and body also should be in harmony in the nature, but is that happen in human beeings? thank you!
~nia~

[The Flame of the Knight]

Wow. this is great.