Suicide - I - A lost Hope

Dejection at its peak........

Standing on the edge,
I gazed the sky,
That’s it God from my side,
I can’t give more try.

A tear left the eye with pain,
surmounting unbearable beliefs,
It’s time to erase the barrier,
Lets jump to relentless reliefs’.

I can’t bear this racism,
Of body, heart and soul,
O god! This mental torture,
Should now end its role.

O lord! please say sorry to my mom,
From my side,
Our family securities will improve,
With this stride.

I love her a lot
& can’t see her weeping,
That’s why I am jumping off ,
When she is sleeping

I can’t bear her pain because of me,
What wrong she actually did,
This disability I got,
Collecting a ruinous skid

Why people can’t live on their own ,
Without interfering with others,
I was so brilliant before,
Then why they are gifting unwanted feathers.

Finally a good bye from a tortured soul,
Crying in pain and tears,
Oh god! Please cram this world with peace,
So that nobody choose to leave their dears.

Author's Note

An act of restlessness and helplessness......

Reviews

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I can't imagine this level of despair... to be so devasted that you have to end your life...

It's only for a moment in your life, but the pain seem unbearable...If you can hold on, and let that moment pass you will see the other side... where life is different and the pain was but a speck of time....

You have the rest of your life to live!...This is a thought provoking piece, indeed!

[just is]

Wow such a certain deepness within this write. I agree with Robbie on this as well.

[Thea]

Wow...I really like this piece...It was so emotional and the expressions are just remarkable...The feeling of grief and melancholy was shown in this poem clearly...Excellent work...I like it a lot! 100/100!
:)))

[Renée]

A lot of pain expressed in WC..sometimes its hard to read..and look at it with out crying..which I am trying not to do right now...I see your in India ....I would like to know what brought you to write this piece? Is it your own experience..or a piece just experimenting with this side of the mind?
Desperation so many areas....

[Melati]

Life is good, life is unfair. But we have to live to the fullest cause we have to love ourselves. Racism is unfair, because life is unfair. That's why I do not believe in any doctrines or religions. You want to know why? Cause they judge and judge one of another, and am so sick of it. I have my own religion "non-judgemental".

Thanks for sharing your cool poem. Keep writing!

[Sleeping Maiden]

Oh wow... such depression speaks out to me! It strikes my heart because i can relate so very well. A deep and a moving piece.. sometimes life tests us huh? It's difficult to be strong when everything crashes..breaking apart..
This is a brilliant poem! I adore it.

[The Flame of the Knight]

Heavy... And depressing... I like it!

[Suditi]

Oh my!
So powerful. So intense.
Its not a typical "oh God, take me away" poem.. It has so much content..
The family ties, the questions, the dejection, the prayer in the end.. It makes it so complete.
Love it.

[Sugar Plum ♥]

The feeling is too sad in your poem...but its so emotional, anyone could feel how much hopeless about life is this man, I wish he didn`t choose to die, even he is calling God, but how his mother will forgive him, that he went away from her?
~nia~

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

This piece bleeds with depression and hopelessness for every day life. Very strong and powerful words in every line from beginning to end. Inspirational, stunning write.

Nicely done.