Why did you go mommy?

From the point of view of a mentally disabled 17 year old boy :)

My World Is Scary

Unknown, Unchanged

My Life Is Dreary

So Simple, So Plain.

My World is Apart

Ripped Into Slices Of 2

Just like my heart

It's breaking for you.


I miss old times,

Remember our plays?

I'd hold a smile,

For days upon days!

I had a best friend,

And a guardian too

Together till the end,

That's what I promised you.

"Never hate me"

You said day after day

"Hate can never be"

I kept hearing you say.


Then one night,

Just like all the rest

Off went my light,

And you tucked me in bed.

You said "i love you"

Before you closed the door.

"I do too" I whispered

As I heard your body hit the floor..


I went out to check

What happened now?

I saw you and gasped,

A scream escaped my mouth.

You were vomiting red,

And I had no idea what to do,

The hospital came,

They were trying to save you.


I didn't understand,

Why were they taking you away?

I held your hand,

Knowing it would be your last day.

You went to a white room,

You were hooked up to wires and machines

"She'll die soon"

Said the doctor so mean!

Why didn't they save you mommy?

Why did they break my heart?

Mommy you promised not to leave me!

Now my chest feels sharp.


Nothing will be the same again,

I don't have you by my side.

I am seventeen,

And I think I lost my smile.

Author's Note

Point of view of a 17 year old mentally disabled person who just lost his mother.

Reviews

[Ahmad Cox]

Very empathetic and beautiful poem. It spoke to my heart.

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Thanks.

[CrashQueen♛]

This is very sad but also enjoyable, fought back a tear I must admit. Good job.

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Thank you.

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Oh my gosh, Missy. This is soo sad. I really enjoyed reading this poem though. I do love the fact that you wrote in in a point of view of a 17 year old mentally disabled person who lost his mother. I had tears building up inside my eyes. Anyone with a heart would want to cry while reading this touching piece. He didn't understand why his mother wasn't saved. Sometimes doctors let many down for not being a super hero to the patient that was brought in to them. The last part is what had me nearly in tears.
"Mommy you promised not to leave me!
Now my chest feels sharp.

Nothing will be the same again,
I don't have you by my side.
I am seventeen,
And I think I lost my smile." --So sad.

Losing someone that we love and look up to is very hard to do. I haven't had that happen to me yet and so I am grateful for that too. I hate for anyone to go through all of that pain and hurt of losing someone so dear to their heart. I am sure that it would take forever to mend back that part of your heart that you had specially made for them.

Fabulous job, Missy :)

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG ;)

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Thank you so much!

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You're welcome :)

[C.C. Marx]

You're ability to write in a different perspective is fantastic! Seriously great job, I felt a little emotional after reading this, damn where are those tissues....

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thanks so much

[C.C. Marx]

my pleasure of course

[Daniel]

o_e that brings me back hard! Yeah, basically what every person wonders when they lose their mom, I honestly don't know why the hell my mom died, or nor ever will. This was really great. Nice write.

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Thank you. Sorry about your mom :/

[Daniel]

Welcome, and it's okay/

[Emrick]

So sad.
good poem!.

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Thank you

[Carolann Dowsett]

Brought tears to my eyes. So emotive, I felt his pain and felt such empathy for him. Wonderfully written, well done.

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[Andrew (MJ) Nugteren]

this is the most saddest, the most perfectly written, and i love it.
I'd hate to hear about it especially wheal listening to sad songs but it's so so beautifully written.
I love this keep up the writing

[SmileBig :)]

Thanks so much :D very kind words :)

[Andrew (MJ) Nugteren]

your very welcome :D and ya I'm a kind guy with kind words i guess :)

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Haha nice :)

[Andrew (MJ) Nugteren]

yeppers

[Tasha]

Wow, this is a awful situation but you told this well. I am touched by your words. Keep it up!
~Tasha

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Thank you :)

[Tasha]

You're welcome :)

[Soul Fire]

Wow powerful poem.Tells the story so well. beautifully penned,great flow, loved it...and it's so devestating all at the same time...Well done!

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Thanks so much :)

[Soul Fire]

You're welcome