If Only I Knew

Sometimes...I feel worthless

So worthless god cant help. 

So I turn to a blade, 

And fall deep into hell. 

My depression starts all over again, 

And I begin to fall apart. 

Is the end of my sadness near? 

Or....is this just the start? 

Oh, how I wish I knew. 

I wish I could end it now and die. 

But I can't...

So Ill just lay down, think, and cry. 

Maybe I'll get no where 

Maybe I'll be like this for good. 

Maybe there is no point in life, 

But try I should! 

I might be crazy. I know I am

And I know I'm not exactly stable! 

Hell, I know that if my life was a show,

The whole world would have cable. 

But it doesn't mean I should try, 

I got a life, I should live it! 

Why waste life hiding in a corner? 

I think I can do this. 

Ohh If only I knew. 

Well, I guess I'll just have to trust in You 

Reviews

[Mark Emerson]

Stick in there no one knows what tomorrow will bring I hope you have someone to confide in and to help

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Thank you :)

[CecilA]

Wow! This poem was depressing until 'I got a life, I should live it!' I felt that I was about to commit suicide. Holy rice crispie treats you tore me into shreds.

"Maybe I'll be like this for good' consider using the word 'forever'

"I got a life' consider 'I have a life' or 'I've got a life'

'So I'll just lay down' consider 'So I'll just lie down'

'Maybe there's just no point in life' consider 'Maybe there's just no point to life'

'But it doesn't mean I should try' consider 'But it doesn't mean I shouldn't try'

I'm not being critical; just trying to be helpful. Just see how my sugestions work for you. If they don't just forget them.

Otherwise, it's great. Can't wait to read more of your poetry.

Thank you for sharing you poetry with us.

Sincerely, CecilA

[SmileBig :)]

Thanks so much! I love your suggestions, very helpful! I'll edit it soon :)

[♪Barklight♪]

cool^_^

[SmileBig :)]

Thank you

[♪Barklight♪]

OMG Like your avie! XD

[SmileBig :)]

Um...what?

[♪Barklight♪]

Your avitar, elven leid?

[♪Barklight♪]

(not sure if i even spelt that right XD )

[SmileBig :)]

Ohh Ahah yea :) its like, my favorite anime everr!

[♪Barklight♪]

I've been meaning to watch it but havn't gotten around to it (I've kindof got a list to go through... XD ) so hyper today ^_^

[SmileBig :)]

Haha you should really watch it! It's kind of disturbing with some parts of it, but it's like, a good disturbing :) oh and an anime to add to ur list; LOVELESS! (Yaoi btw)

[♪Barklight♪]

'll think about that... but i'll definantly watch EL

[SmileBig :)]

Good! Haha :)

[The Invisible Girl]

Great poem! Keep fighting there is always something to fight for! Plus there is hope!
Amazing 100/100

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Thanks!

[Timeless-Chan]

"Hell, I know if my life was a show, the whole world would have cable." I feel like that all the timeO_O This was very touching and meaningful. I hope that you don't give up on whomever has given you the courage to trust because its not an easy thing to do now a days! Love the poem! Keep on moving forward!
~Dreamer!

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Thanks so much :)