The Missing Heart

I look around 

Another heart i have found, 

Foot steps treading, 

Onto a broken ground. 

As the footsteps become clearer 

I begin to hear her, 

She whispers through the air, 

Lord, you are no longer my healer. 

She trudges closer dragging feet along, 

Shes a little bit more then just a little lost 

I hear the splashes of the water, 

She screams "Now I am gone" 

Now I am gone. 

I run in her direction towards the sea, 

I scream "Oh God please don't let this be" 

She's no where to be found, 

And I fall onto my knees. 

"Please fix this broken heart, 

Give her another start, 

She can fix what she's messed up, 

Please fix her broken heart." 

I draw the cross in the sand, 

Dig my feet into the land, 

Stare out into the midnight sky, 

And then I stand. 

I hear a sound off in the distance, 

I stop and quiet, give her screams a listen. 

I run to her side, 

And find the broken heart that's been missing. 

I drag her to the land again, 

Make her breathe out and in, 

Please stay here, 

That's where you should have been. 

Reviews

[Shay]

i enjoyed this alot, it was very well written and emotions leave an impact for the reader, nice work

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Thank u very much :)

[anxia]

You are such a sweet writer!I find your poems,like this one, heartwarming .Good work!

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Thank you :D

[writingcrazy55555]

What a fantastic poem! It was fluid, fresh, and extremely well-written! I loved how you told a story in a poetic format. That was a very interesting thing to do. Poetry is a fantastic thing. It can be manipulated in so many dirrerent ways and sound incredible, as you have so nicely demonstated in this magnificent poem. Great job, nice work!

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Thank you Soo much! :D

[writingcrazy55555]

You're welcome! It was a great poem! :)

[Gothic Girl]

well done! the story flowed well in the poem. :)

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Thank you :)

[Roger Ferguson II]

very beautifully written. i think you could break it into stanzas so that it read easier, but of course its fine as it is, free verse poem are some of the best in my book. i like the loose rhyme scheme. it tells a story very well also, great work.

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Thank you :)

[Timeless-Chan]

I like it:) It's an interesting story for sure and I love the way you changed to boldness/font(?) of some of the words so that I could get a really good feel for what is what^_^ Great poem!
~Dreamer

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[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Missy, this is really beautifully written! Sometimes this is how I feel. That someone out there is picking up the pieces to my heart and will one day bring them back to me. Wouldn't that be great? xD This bitter cold world is filled with shattered hearts though. It's so sad and depressing :( I like how you call out to God for his help! That always help, it does for me anyway. This is one of your best work, I must say. Keep up the good work. :)

Ashley Rivers-- your friend ;)

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Thanks so much! And yes, that would just be so nice. Calling out to god helps me a lot, cause he always answers me in one way or another. Thanks again :)

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You're welcome! :) Yes, he's a major role model for me in my everyday life challenges no matter what. Again, you're very welcome :)

[Poison Ivy]

the font changes on this really bring out certain words that might not have been before. the emotion is clear even within the stops and starts. i think its great :)

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Thanks so much! :)

[Junert]

It's kinda cool.

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Thanks

[Yozora Misa]

I'm new, but I'm glad this is the first poem that I read. It's really well written.

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Well then welcome! And thank you very much :)