Struggle on and on

this is random and depressive. i was down when I wrote this so yeah. My head ladies and Gentleman.

Why do we do this?

struggle on and on

to the turnings of time

struggling evermore.

ever on and on.

going no where fast.

listening to the pain.

the pain of hearts break.

Screaming.

screaming souls.

your soul.

screaming

as you push ever on

and on.

you're pushing deeper, deeper.

losing yourself.

in the abyssal trench on your mind.

on and on you push.

the screaming won't stop.

Why don't you just pull the trigger?

and stop the wheels turning?

I don't know why either.

Author's Note

I apologise for this piece, It is likely terrible and i am not even sure why i am publishing this.
I write it in one go, took me about three minutes.

Reviews

[Vincent Moore]

My new talented friend, never apologize for your creative mind, as poets our words often come directly from our soul. No matter what the subject, as they can be very diverse indeed. I have similar scribes and sometimes after I woke up and found the empty wine bottles rolling at my feet, had to look at again at what I penned the night before and wonder why I published it, however I make no excuse for my writing. I am who I am and any gifts my Muse give to me, I publish. This work is directly a mood at the time, let it stand as is my poet. One suggestion, no need to place it under MATURE, you will get more views by placing it in everyone. This should be read by everyone indeed. Peace my friend.

[John Holmes]

Thank you for your encouraging word Vincent, They are much appreciated. I think I often regret publishing some works or put a mature rating on them because many individuals do not encounter such dark moments within their soul (although I may be giving many people too little credit) But I have changed the rating, Thank you again.

I guess, at the end of the day, Poetry is the soul, and as well as the light, we should show the dark.

[Vincent Moore]

Mostly definitely my gifted poet, show both sides, light and the dark. Keep writing, your words are being read.

[Anna Edelweiss]

I have completely fallen in love with every word you've written. This poem specifically has made an impression on me, I feel this in so many ways. You're writing is beautiful, don't be hard on yourself this is a wonderful piece :-)

[Traci]

J it is in moments like these when the heart and soul is exposed, your creative mind flows, and bleeding thoughts are penned. Never apologize for that. This is a piece many can relate to, and I've felt this way many times in my life. I didn't just read your words, I felt them. It is during these dark times that we find strength. Much love to you, my friend.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Sometimes a "purging" like this is necessary in order to move forward. The concept is not lost on me...I have felt this way. My piece about the Pheonix is sort of related, in that there is that ever moving cycle of life and then there are the "little deaths" in between where we succumb and then come out of the darkness only to see the darkness starting to press in on us again. Anyway, I totally feel this one.

Technically...there are some things you could do to clean this up a little. A few punctuation errors, and some of the repetition of words could be dealt with a little differently, I think. Still, I'm looking on this as I said before, a necessary purging of thought.