This is amazing, breathtaking. I love the flow of this poem, it so natural. You also use very descriptive words, making the poem beautiful.
"Who gave me no notice
And swallowed me up
Like a meaningless toy." Those are amazing lines, my favorite ones. Wonderful, keep it up!
I love how you are able to rhyme the words that gives this poem its meaning. I'd say it's different in the way that most people might not be used to reading something that could become rap lyrics.. this is very good I'd be lying if I said I wasn't impressed. :))
This is amazing, breathtaking. I love the flow of this poem, it so natural. You also use very descriptive words, making the poem beautiful.
"Who gave me no notice
And swallowed me up
Like a meaningless toy." Those are amazing lines, my favorite ones. Wonderful, keep it up!
acceptance is a great liberator...when one accepts limitations...horizons automatically brighten / broaden / expand....and quality is only lost in the fog of darkess...to be found in one manifestation or another...to find meaning in the apparent meaningless is a key to a satisfactory existence...it is not ignorant to ask questions or search for answers...even if they never materialize...it is only ignorant to say that all is lost to hopelessness...for that is death before death itself...the journey is the most important facet...not the destination...this piece made me think...i need to think...my sanity relies upon it...thank you...
Hi there-
the rhyming scheme in this was a bit off for me... the way it changed in every stanza was quite distracting for me. Otherwise, I think this was great- there's great imagery and a wonderful use of emotion. Great write.
-Coral-
I'm Christina Christodoulou at the age of 17. My native language is Greek and I live in Cyprus.
Awards:
Red Instinct Award (5th)
Aug 13, 2010
* The Thanatos Award Contest
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