A Missing Quality

A dark blade, oblivion
My soul in delirium
And yet its mysterious

Why am I still curious
To pursue my deliverance
While trapped in my ignorance

When the winds shout furious
In the face of innocence
Masked and pretentious

I cry for the reasons
In my sleep haunt me visions
Forming a solid proof

In my heart still lies truth
To shape me aloof
From a deranged mood

What sinister move
Did I take by chance
To be weak by choice

Suffocation in noise
I obeyed that strange voice
Who taught me to love

Who gave me no notice
And swallowed me up
Like a meaningless toy

Crawling under the feet of destiny
In secret hope to embrace infinity
Its all a test of morality

To unfold that lost quality
To learn to conceal with sensuality
Then accept my self mortality

Equality

Reviews

[MiidniightSoul]

This is amazing, breathtaking. I love the flow of this poem, it so natural. You also use very descriptive words, making the poem beautiful.
"Who gave me no notice
And swallowed me up
Like a meaningless toy." Those are amazing lines, my favorite ones. Wonderful, keep it up!

[Aven]

a very interesting write, very sophisticated. :)

[DrSprinkz73]

I love how you are able to rhyme the words that gives this poem its meaning. I'd say it's different in the way that most people might not be used to reading something that could become rap lyrics.. this is very good I'd be lying if I said I wasn't impressed. :))

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a great quality to this piece..the flow in impeccable and your descriptive phrase is really impressive..well done..very enjoyable.

[alan peter kelly]

acceptance is a great liberator...when one accepts limitations...horizons automatically brighten / broaden / expand....and quality is only lost in the fog of darkess...to be found in one manifestation or another...to find meaning in the apparent meaningless is a key to a satisfactory existence...it is not ignorant to ask questions or search for answers...even if they never materialize...it is only ignorant to say that all is lost to hopelessness...for that is death before death itself...the journey is the most important facet...not the destination...this piece made me think...i need to think...my sanity relies upon it...thank you...

[Miss Coral]

Hi there-
the rhyming scheme in this was a bit off for me... the way it changed in every stanza was quite distracting for me. Otherwise, I think this was great- there's great imagery and a wonderful use of emotion. Great write.
-Coral-

[Bard Constantine]

This has a mystic quality... almost dreamy in a way.

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. profound and sublime ... and absolutely brilliantly expressed ... these words travel at a blistering pace ... amazing ...

[J. R.]

The rhyme scheme adds a very nice rhythm to the poem, the imagery is intense,and it flows smoothly together.

[My Fair Lady]

The ryhthmic sequences of this piece are intriguing. Nicely done.