syncopating

syncopating

A Poem by m.s.early

Cycle of motion 
Syncopated rhythms
She sings in alternating stress beats

I wait for the round
Find myself in an interlude
Of my own making 

Surprised to find
She’s dancing the Waltz
While I thought I had found the four

The difference between us
Is she is jazz and uptown
And I am as vulgar as a pop song

Her heart pulses
Like Timpanis in perfect pitch
I rumble like an empty gut

And still shes dances
And pretends to be wooed
Even though I am only lip syncing

© 2014 m.s.early


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the dance is the dance at the end of the day, or night. Groovy poem. I enjoyed this one.

Posted 9 Years Ago


A familiar dance that most of us have practised at one time or another.

Clever, clever poem.

Beccy

Posted 10 Years Ago


okay, so back to read for my usual zillionth time...Frieda made me think here. I wanna know is he lip syncing to fool her or is he lip syncing to keep her? I lip sync..when I have head phones on in front of this computer, hopefully the camera never comes on and records me!LOL I do it for the sake of my family's hearing:P and because I want to feel emotional connection....same here or different?

Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

I didn't intend for it to mean deceiving. He sings terribly so he's just mouthing the words because .. read more
Gypsy Warrior Queen

10 Years Ago

Maybe he doesn't give himself enough credit?lol
Sometimes we don't have the rhythm but we can still follow the beat, unless of course you're lip syncing, which is kind of underhanded and not harmoniously inclined....

The difference between us
Is she is jazz and uptown
And I am as vulgar as a pop song

Love that stanza, you hit all the high notes as usual in your poetry.

Posted 10 Years Ago


They say opposites attract, and they do but can they coexist? I loved the comparisons of personality you chose for each of them, so many couples are like this, so different from each other that it keeps things interesting unless one tries to control instead of enhance each others life. you don't have to be the same, It's probably more fun if you are not ...if both can control the urge to conform instead of embrace differences. The last line is very sad.


Posted 10 Years Ago


Each heart beat has an echo. It sends a message across the waves like a traveler finding a preferred pace. It needs to be infinite and therefore opposite. A circle is always well rounded:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


wow, the metaphor is great in this...love your analogies..
she is jazz, I am a vulgar pop song...
I don't deserve her but she makes me feel I do with her wooing song.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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