swallowed by the sea

If I love something too long it turns to rain,

Pit pats into the lakes,

Then swallowed by the sea.

But I'll breathe this one with breath fresh as spring

Into a balloon released, 

Carried in soft water vapor,

Bowed along double variegation,

Into morphing sky loft clouds.

Will I whisper into winds

With warm words spoken truly,

Cast loosely as dandelion parachutes

Wafting gracefully?

For steam collects invisibly

On the uppermost azure cupola

Where there tugs Earth's affections

Drawing dreams from vapors

Collapsing into lakes

Then swallowed by the sea.

Reviews

[paul sal.....]

perhaps collect the rain in a jar or barrel and drink the love rather than it running to the sea

[Alfred Kukitz]

Silver this is a outstanding! I wanted to come along, I felt as though I was coming along on this trip. Your words seemed to embrace me in a warm invitation. This is the first kind of experience I had reading someone's work. Bravo!

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Stunning beautifully penned.



I loved these stanza's lines here lovely.




If I love something too long it turns to rain,

Pit pats into the lakes,

Then swallowed by the sea.


Will I whisper into winds

With warm words spoken truly,

Cast loosely as dandelion parachutes

Wafting gracefully?


Blessings. Kindred poet

[Woody]

stunning imagery. great first stanza. but the whole poem is an absolute delight to read.
I loved this. the work of a true poet.

[kublakhan27]

I always find myself looking at things in ways I never did when I come from your poetry...the words and images you use to evoke this helpless plights are razor-sharp in their vividness...there are snatches of hope through the middle, as one attempts to manipulate the system, but nature ultimately wins out as always, and because it doesn't speak our language, it can't even be reasoned with...great work as always silver.

[Ruth]

Elegant poem, cycles and emotion, affection and wonder...beautiful!

[Sami Khalil]

A graceful poem with so many eloquent lines. You tug at your reader's affections...:)....................

[highonwords]

this has an air of acceptance and sounds refreshing....thank you for sharing :)

[Frieda P]

Stunning x....I was captivated by that first line.

If I love something too long it turns to rain

Sweet surrender has never sounded better...dreams from vapors sigh....