along i think this sometimes

Along I think this sometimes:

I will travel a while longer with you;

I have not yet tired of your impassioned soliloquies

nor your quaint meanderings on love or old friends.

"Yes love, it is true I'm not always listening.

It's just how you describe me...

as if in love with a poet

too kind to compete for air time."

Looking ahead into the dampening line,

between your space and ours...

isn't it better I should replace a verse

with something not spoken until later,

perhaps at a time when we are resting

just along a scenic view,

or under the shade of our own canopy?

"No, don't say that, just because I am quiet

doesn't mean I'm not listening.

Perhaps my coffee wasn't hot enough

or the berries have lost their flavor

and the moment of those thought conceptions

have brought me to a place where

I might stretch my brain for little

and try to remember it for a poem."

"Yes dear, there is much I love about the way

your voice softens when the moon is low

and the evening brings us closer,

but for now my backpack is weighing

and it's time to walk and I'd like to think."

And though I hear it in my head,

I would never remind you that I am here for the walk

and your company but enhances.

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Cutting and sweet enchantment in the same breath, reminds me of real life relationships. Felt the bubble pop in this one, but like poetry we'll follow it anywhere.

You guys never listen, herein lies the problem. ;-)

No, don't say that, just because I am quiet
doesn't mean I'm not listening.
Perhaps my coffee wasn't hot enough
or the berries have lost their flavor
and the moment of those thought conceptions
have brought me to a place where
I might stretch my brain for little
and try to remember it for a poem

Adore that to pieces, it could stand alone, why is it in quotation marks? Really enjoyed this canopy you've created.

[m.s.early]

The "un-quoted" verses are thoughts and the "quotes" are pieces of conversation. It is written from the perspective of one lover (could be either gender I suppose) concerning the other. I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[Frieda P]

Real life conversations...oh my you're truly poetically inclined aren't ya? ;-) Loved it....

[Sami Khalil]

A swooning and soothing write of affection and romance. The ladies will love this...A splendid poem...:)..................

[m.s.early]

Thank you Sami. Sometimes I think language was invented solely for wooing women ;)

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. True...You are welcome...:)...................

[Shirlena]

This is darn romantical (made up word)...I'm sorry I like doing that. Most often we write what we experience are some one else's we are close to. You sound like you might know what you're doing -*wink*. Extra charming write!

[m.s.early]

Thank you so much Shirlena. I was trying to capture a non-elegant situation in a common relationship.

[Shirlena]

...and you certainly did that. That's one of the things that made it so charming... is the realism.

[Lyn Anderson]

hmmm, while usually your writes swoon, this one has a subtle bite to it. I like it.

[m.s.early]

The thing is... I was supposing this is how someone would perceive me to be at times. ;)

[Lyn Anderson]

Hmmm, that is interesting. Such a humble man.

[m.s.early]

I ain't always circus tents and ice cream cones ;)

[Lyn Anderson]

Oh, I could say something about that, but then again, I would be a) starting rumours, and b) jeopardizing my parole from MATURE jail.