perpetuity

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Below is a link to information about the constellation that inspired this poem

Coma Bernices, Facts and Myth

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perpetuity

While considering a name, stepping out 

into the cool of an evening,

Aristotle ponders the fate of Ptolemy.

Off in the realm of his eyes, locks of hair 

are still auburn amid indigo backdrop skies.

He sips a coffee, crushes a cigarette,

and checks his email

while deliberating the integrity of priests.

Wonders,  'perhaps if a comet were as beautiful as her,

there she would stay...

a constellation softly twinkling 

among the likes of Leo the lion and Virgo the virgin.'

He searches through his inbox

to find an old letter Berenices wrote

insisting that love would last beyond the war,

and thus her locks are so dimly lit .

It spoke of love in gaping infinity 

a deal made with a god,

a returning hero,

and a war that allowed them bloom.

Tapping at the keys, a letter emerges

and another cigarette finds his lips.

Aristotle is writing history under a street light

on a Dell tablet he purchased on E-Bay

to last in eternal fashion.

Reviews

[m.s.early]

I found during my research on the constellation Coma Bernices a minor discrepancy about the hair color of Queen Berenice II of Egypt. Some say it was auburn while the link I included to it says it was blonde. I preferred auburn for this poem.

Cheers!

[Frieda P]

So eloquently pen'd xavier...I'm a Leo so this one holds a special place in my heart. You pick the most interesting topics and your poetry flies with them so elegantly....love your mix of modernism with your astronomical Almagest write. Admirable, kudos.

[m.s.early]

That is very gracious of you Frieda. Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[BlackRose]

WOW! Superb piece. Love how you did this. It's as if back then meets today's world.

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[m.s.early]

Thank you so very kindly :)

[BlackRose]

My pleasure, your very welcome.

[Blue]

Silver, I like how you incorporated these people in today's era. Fascinating and unique! A fun to read!

[m.s.early]

Thank you so much Azrel. :)

[Blue]

Why do people keep misspelling my name? Haha. ;)

[m.s.early]

I'm so sorry. It was typo. I must have fat fingers this morning :)

[Blue]

No problem. Good morning to you. :)

[m.s.early]

Good morning, Arzel :)

[Blue]

It's an hour and a half before midnight here. Haha.

[Beau Maysey]

This poem feels like it's complex to a level I might not even understand with research.
I suddenly feel very ignorant in the midst of this work, although it appears very good and thoughtful, at the very least thought-provoking.
This poem is interestingly anachronistic, and feels like time has compressed itself firmly.
At any rate, good imagery and word-choice; I'm going to have to ponder this piece a little longer before I can discuss it in any good detail :I

[m.s.early]

Thank you Beau. I included a link to myth and facts about the constellation. Thank you for appreciating the anachronistic element :)

[Closed]

wow. this is really great. the imagery and emotion you put into your work is really phenomenal and quite stunning. it's shorter than some poems, but is beautiful in its simplicity. this is very, very well done!

[m.s.early]

Thank you very kindly for your thoughts Claire :)