lacuna

I.

Her name was Alnico,

and she rotated madly

clockwise like seasons in time with the earth

while the face of the moon

husked stars from her shadows,

inclined to keep smiling in the light of her mirth.

II.

His name was Cuprum.

He drew a circumference

as wide as an orbit around sun and moon.

He stood like a fulcrum,

centered and stoic,

while she stayed in the bounds of her cyclic commune.

III.

And each time she passed him

A light wave emitted;

they shared an electron on a covalent plane.

The light was intense now,

saturating their sphere

and the wattage was measured for loss and for gain.

IV.

The dimension between them

was apparently empty,

yet beautifully arranged as she passed through his space.

Electrical chemistry,

though they never were touching,

was obviously induced between lovers displaced.

Author's Note

Alnico is an alloy used to make magnets. aluminium (Al), nickel (Ni) and cobalt (Co)
Cuprum is latin for copper.
Lacuna is an unfilled space.

When a magnet passes between two conductors (such as copper) electricity is generated. Although the space between appears empty, there is a measurable current.

Cheers!

Reviews

[BlackRose]

Electrified brilliance. Currents in my head turn the lightbulb on as I'm reading a clever, unique take on the love of two people.

@{/:o)

[m.s.early]

Thank you blackrose. I'm glad you got a "charge" out of it ;)

[BlackRose]

Haha, your very watt'come. ;o)

[m.s.early]

Whew... I deserved that one ;-)

[Beau Maysey]

What a unique and clever take on chemistry to make a startlingly charming poem! :D
A set of realistic characters created from elements, this story plays like a real love account.
I love how their attraction is literally magnetic, and how their names sound like real-life names.
"they shared an electron on a covalent plane" sounds like some kind of molecular date night.
I love the way diction is played with in the poem, and adds to its meaning. Way to go!

[m.s.early]

Thank you so much. I let the geek in my creep out on this one :)

[redflutterby]

Love and attraction portrayed in scientific brilliance. Wonderful piece...loved it!!

[m.s.early]

Thank you very kindly :)

[Linda alexander]

Electrical chemistry,
though they never were touching,
was obviously inducted between lovers displaced.

Excellent poetry, and fantastic metaphor too, what all things in the universe the great lovers will be compared, it never will end as far as humans inhabit in this earth, displaced lovers connected through electricity and telepathy, proud of you for these latest technology in poetry

[m.s.early]

Thank you Linda. That was a very touching review.

[Linda alexander]

You most welcome, take care

[Leyla Hess]

The poetry informed by physics has always intrigued me, as a chemist, and I've been wont to attempt it myself. That is the entire project of the Ondines, being the poetry of the waves. This, too, interests me--the treatment of the flow of current invisible to the sensorium, but generated in accordance with some prescribed natural law. Perhaps it may be of interest to you to investigate what precisely such a law might be. (I would add, also, that the term for a current generated by a moving B-field is "induced," and not "inducted.")

[m.s.early]

Thank you for the depth of your comments :)

[Rene Velez]

great insight before the poem really helped this along, a fine write, just a suggestion if I may, I don't think "and" is needed in the beginning of the third stanza.

[m.s.early]

Thank you for reading Rene :)

[Brittany Zedalis]

This poem is cleverly thought out. Awesome job! I really enjoyed it!

[m.s.early]

Thank you so much Brittany :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Adding a little logic to the laws of attraction very cool :)

[m.s.early]

Thank you so much Vidya :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[Marie Anzalone]

We are such stuff as stars are made, and all that. Really enjoyed this; nothing more to add to what other reviewers said. Science truly is the language of the gods.

[m.s.early]

Thank you so much Marie :)

[lost girl]

I like the way you explain attraction and connection through science and poetry. Had I been taught like this in school maybe I would have wanted to continue on. You got mad skills :)

[m.s.early]

Ha! Write what you know is what they told me. Sorry... sometimes the geek slips out :)

[lost girl]

Hey! don't hide the geek...they are pros at what they know...I wish I had been more studious :)