a frozen town

a frozen town

A Poem by m.s.early

thick blanket ice inches that thaw not,
chromed reached branches,
empty leaves,
streets still, 
windows edges steamed,
barely mercury registering, 
wind screaming,
awnings drooping,  
neon blinking,
breath scarved, 
misted, 
frozen,  
sparsely layered footprints leading,
lapis lazuli skies purely, 
clouds paled
fade to greyed, 
cleared, 
starry evening,
lamped streets, 
successive gleaming,
fuchsia skied morning frigid, 
dreaming.

© 2014 m.s.early


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That's a pretty amazing write!

Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

Thank you for reading Stephen. I hope you return :)
For me this created a lovely picture.

lapis lazuli skies purely,

clouds paled

fade to greyed,

cleared,

starry evening,

lamped streets,

successive gleaming,

fuchsia skied morning frigid,

dreaming"

Awesome!

Posted 10 Years Ago


I find it somewhat ironic that some below have commented that your piece flows so well--being that flow is precisely what it avoids. Much of your work--we share a common inspiration, here, perhaps--invests in the processual, and in looking at this we are so often wont to overlook the phenomena of non-process--to be crude, of frozen-ness. I am reminding of Goethe's Faust, in which the doctor wagers with the devil against ever being able to say "to a moment, 'tarry!'" Perhaps, when things are frozen over, as we see in your piece, we may glimpse a certain beautiful stillness; however, we cannot make a home of tundra. Really, well done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

Thank you for such a very well articulated review.
Wow .. this flowed beautifully, made me picture every word in my mind. Very impressive! beautiful piece

Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

Thank you very kindly, Johanna :)
heh, this made me think of my town when a storm came through a few weeks ago. great job!! I enjoyed reading this.

Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

Thank you Brittany. One of those came through hours and then it came through again. :)
I think some of your imagery is really strong and lovely, but there's an incontinuity in the verb tenses and phrasing that makes this a little disconcerting to read. Again, try reading it out loud, and you might feel some of those inconsistencies.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Beauty in frozen moments....winter is such a wondrous thing. She is so elusive and frigid in her wake. She never fails however to melt the heart. I love the flow of your spectrum in your icy morning. Blessings dear poet.

Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much, lost girl :)
nice picture you've painted, well done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

(: thank you so much Rene :)
a depressing day turned picturesque. a good day for snuggling and tickling under the covers.

Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

Incredibly true Mia. Thank you for reading :)

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