e string

Being a guitar string,

I am a note when strung lightly

doesn't judge too much.

I wish myself a poem sometimes,

but I am only one string

praying not to snap.

My brothers and sisters

E, A, D, G, and B are gone now,

Lost in a passionate riff

(hot times long ago).

I am the high E

being learned to play by a child.

Having never been a child

I don't understand

that his purity will not be lost

by tuning too tight.

He finds melody in my singularity

one note at a time.

He finds the sweet note

when he is alone,

and his eyes are closed,

and his teeth are clenched,

and his mind is clear,

and his heart is full of blood.

A child with a message and a song

is taking me to a street

where no one notices one string,

just his voice and I,

one note at a time.

As we go,

I sense his changes.

He down tunes me

and changes the key.

As he gets older

I get hard like a stone,

and he gets soft like water.

I rest in a velvet case.

He changes the world.

Reviews

[Rita L. Sev]

Awesome metaphor here, Xavier. This is an impressive piece; you really committed to the image and came up with a great poem.

[m.s.early]

Thank you so much Rita. I really appreciate that :)

[Closed]

absolutely wonderful. I was going through a bunch of your work and I was really captivated by this one. I'm an avid musician so this really speaks to me. this is lovely. well done!

[m.s.early]

That's great to learn. I play piano, organ, and keyboards. There's a link under my profile name to my music page. Cheers!

[s y e]

This is just perfect, X - Simply perfect.

[m.s.early]

Thank you so much noodle :)

[DaughterNature]

I like the idea of personifying a guitar string, for sure, and for the most part I think you did this successfully. There are just a few moments when I think: "Is the character of the string completely defined? Would the guitar string really say that?" Try reading this out loud to find the moments when the character sounds inconsistent.

[Rene Velez]

good imagery, a fine write I must say.

[m.s.early]

Thank you so much for stopping by and reading Rene :)

[paul sal.....]

You sir, are no bumpkin, clever ,clever ,clever. I think children can change the world, if we only listen. Perhaps one note at a time is the way to do it. beautiful........

[m.s.early]

Thank you for very kind and gracious review dear poet :)

[Ruth]

Lovely! The humble guitar, how often we forget what it perceives and echoes with...resonating...love this x

[m.s.early]

Thank you so much Poppy :)

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

And If you see my reflection in the snow covered hills
Well the landslide bring it down
Oh the landslide bring it down - stevie knicks

Transformation such a surreal and soul searing apocalypse. It might be the day and the state of my raw empathy but my tears fall.

As we go,
I sense his changes.
He down tunes me
and changes the key.

As he gets older
I get hard like a stone,
and he gets soft like water.

I rest in a velvet case.

He changes the world.

Doesn't get much more real than this!

[m.s.early]

Thank you so much Queenie :)

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

I like the Melodious Journey.. :-)

Good Wishes!!

[m.s.early]

Thank you Pri :)