her name

There is grace in her throat when she sings my name;

it is wet on her lips perched like doves 

in the roses taking flight.

Once her breasts heave and the air is flushed,

my name raises avidly in bi-tonal fluted chords,

bracing her elbows against my chest

and struggling to release her harmony

in my patient ears.

My love stews her name viciously.

It is katzenjammer and clangor

once it pumps from my diaphragm deranged,

a din fracturing the air around us;

its potency observed when my hands grip her waist

and clutch her to delve in her,

to withdraw from her.

Her name is planed between abrasive clenched jaws

while mine flitters gently back down among us.

Hers is replaced by devouring it, becoming it

while mine licks her lips with glistening

and waits to kiss again.

Reviews

[Sugar Plum ♥]

I love the whole structure of your poem , specially the beginning...It flows very nice, from image and imagination -to activity and desire, The sensuality grows, with mixed emotions and compilation between yin and yang, innocent touch and vicious grip...All is striving to perfect harmony of woman. her name matters.
Lovely piece ♥

::n.nour ::
::03.014::

[m.s.early]

Thank you for such a thoughtful review :)

[Anne Lyons]

So passionate!! Really enjoyed reading this!

[m.s.early]

Thank you much Whitney :)

[asdarkeyesclose]

'My love stews her name viciously.'

some great images in this, i particularly liked 'perched like doves in the roses taking flight' and 'abrasive clenched jaws'. this is well-written breathing of sensuality and sophistication with startling contrasts. fantastic.

[m.s.early]

Thank you so much for reviewing. You're review is encouraging :)

[Frieda P]

Woo, this couldn't have blown my skirt up any higher, did you hear that katzenjammer sound...I loved it first stanza to last. This takes flight off your page like cooing doves my friend....stellar.

[m.s.early]

(: thank you Frieda. Be careful with that skirt :)

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Good show..

Keep Sharing..

Good Wishes..!!

[m.s.early]

(: thank you so much for reading :)

[emmajoy]

' .. Her name is planed between abrasive clenched jaws ~ while mine flitters gently back down among us.. .. '

Without any doubt - this can be termed a Winter poem, most definitely saves on the heating! Your words are threaded with great and deliberate care, passion at each link. Unusual wording, pointing the reader into a new direction. Thanks for sharing.

[m.s.early]

(: thank you for saying so Emma. Your thoughts are greatly appreciated. :)

[stars are far]

This is filled of passion.. i loved it ..
you last stanza is amazing :)
well done :)

[m.s.early]

Thank you stars. I'm glad you enjoyed reading this :)

[stars are far]

my pleasure :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Passion and urgency in every line it has got to be one of your best and I love them all so ....:P(oh yes I did)hahaha

[m.s.early]

That's so kind of you Vidya. I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
(You had to go there didn't you lol)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Hahaha yes I am cheeky that way :)

[Mockingbird]

brings to mind the moment of simultaneous ecstasy sustained between two lovers who have a fierce desire for one another and immortalizing it in verse. sensual and classy. leaves me breathless.

[m.s.early]

thank you mocking bird. catch your breath. then, you can enjoy it again. ;)

[Mockingbird]

promises, promises...