her name

There is grace in her throat when she sings my name;

it is wet on her lips perched like doves 

in the roses taking flight.

Once her breasts heave and the air is flushed,

my name raises avidly in bi-tonal fluted chords,

bracing her elbows against my chest

and struggling to release her harmony

in my patient ears.

My love stews her name viciously.

It is katzenjammer and clangor

once it pumps from my diaphragm deranged,

a din fracturing the air around us;

its potency observed when my hands grip her waist

and clutch her to delve in her,

to withdraw from her.

Her name is planed between abrasive clenched jaws

while mine flitters gently back down among us.

Hers is replaced by devouring it, becoming it

while mine licks her lips with glistening

and waits to kiss again.

Reviews

[paul sal.....]

her name is lust...................

[B.J]

Incredible imagery the last stanza is so beautiful summing up the whole piece

[Marie Anzalone]

Fresh love is a surrender; there is a push-pull, a struggle for control. There is an urgency to each transaction, a heaviness in each breath, a locura in each thought of the other. We must meet halfway, or the weaker partner drowns in the stronger.

[m.s.early]

Balance is beautiful conduit to immeasurable blessings. Thank you for reading :)

[DaughterNature]

I love the music of this and how it flows with the seductive language. The only thing that detracts is the prevalent use of "is" -- consider how powerful your other verbs are, like "heave," "bracing," "struggling," "release," "stews," "pumps," etc. Try to make all your verbs as powerful as those!

[Jack...]

X my man, this one drives fast on the highway in the slow seductive lane. Very cool my friend.

[m.s.early]

What a cool review... and I come from a group of kids that cool means "cool"... if you know what I mean.

[Jack...]

I know what you mean.

[Shirlena]

What's in a name, you were all over this one...say it, SAY IT, SAY MY NAME...what's my name. I don't know that I've heard a man say man name with such fevered bliss such as this...dog it's been a minute but I digress. This is fabulosity!

[m.s.early]

Thank you so much for your spirited review Shirlena. You, my friend are a fresh air :)

[Shirlena]

It's rightly called 3 kinds of crazy so I take

[Shirlena]

oops(finishing my sentence)...so thank you for the compliment x.

[AYVID N]

"There is grace in her throat when she sings my name;
it is wet on her lips perched like doves
in the roses taking flight."

My favorite verse in this passion-filled tribute. It has a musical touch to it...

The contrast between hers and his is created masterfully...Loved it!

[m.s.early]

Thank you very kindly Divya. I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[Lyn Anderson]

abrasive clenched jaws. That's some kinda love.

[m.s.early]

Indeed KL. Thank you for your review :)

[WE]

beautiful imagery your first stanza just made this whole piece come alive

[m.s.early]

Thank you so much Gracey :)

[Linda alexander]

It is katzenjammer and clangor
once it pumps from my diaphragm deranged,
a din fracturing the air around us;
An excellent poem with splendid imagination, the vocabulary is used in the best way, sothat savoring is optimum, congrats

[m.s.early]

Thank you so very much Linda :)

[Linda alexander]

You most welcome, my pleasure, take care