eden

It is from dust and enmity in which we came

this curse to toil the ground in search for knowledge

will live until the day we die.

forbearing we sail this dust and i,

the creeping things eating it on legless writhing

and consume the earth on which it crawls.

Between rivers walked amidst the afternoon sun,

the garden now behind and the uncertainty 

and curses bestowed following generations.

Reviews

[Leyla Hess]

I appreciate the investment in the processual and the invocation of the three-part history of the world. I suppose a fall from whatever Eden is fortunate, in that it excuses any attempt at ascension.

[m.s.early]

Thank you for your review and appreciating the depth of the poems source. Your review is brilliantly written.

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Eden is just an image here - view which is forbidden and closed for the miserable creatures...in the dusky world of earth...seems :) Not very positive, but still we shouldn`t leave hope to possess again our high place. With Almighty?

::n.nour::

[m.s.early]

Thank you for your candid review sugar. Your thoughts find optimism in even in the bleak :)

[paul sal.....]

Considering the condition of human interaction around the world, it's fair to say there is still plenty of enmity and we don't seem to have learned a whole hell of a lot. A garden planting of the mind might very well return us to Eden but, there are still plenty of snakes crawling among the synapses of those that have the power .........

[m.s.early]

Thank you for this powerful review. Your thoughts are greatly appreciated

[s y e]

My word, the imagery in this poem blew me away, it is so, so powerful.

[Rita L. Sev]

And to dust we shall return... Excellent piece, Xavier.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Yes "we live until the day we die ". Excellent poetry Xavier :)

[Ruth]

What is passed on will leave its mark, either in high regard or dissolved rationale...your poignancy is always pristine and mind boggling x

[Mockingbird]

pretty bleak. echos of catholic school instilling us with the notion we came from dust and enmity. imagery of doom and gloom. conveys hopelessness and faithlessness. isn't one of your fuzzier poems.

[Lyn Anderson]

This is an interesting piece, with a mix of philosophy/religious undertones, ashes to ashes us all, condemned to commit the same sins over and over again ...